Your story was funny. I question the fact of whether a group of girls really do the things you have at slumber parties or not, but I have to realize that most of the women of the world do and sometimes you suffer to look good (games or no). I feel sorry for some of the guys; Naruto, Shikamaru, and Neji the most because they each have a dramatic moment. But what the hell, it was still funny. Keep up the good work! You never know, you have an interesting storyline that could gain popularity.

Oh, before I forget, I only have two tips for your composition in fiction writing. Whenever you provide dialogue, make sure the reader will be able to tell who is talking. It makes it easier to interpret the speech being held amongst different characters. Also, try giving some descriptive language in the story. You don't have to be super elaborate, just explain certain scenes by adding details for the setting. [Some people don't have great imaginations to just pull off seeing a room or outside, but that'll be between us. T_<]

Other than that, I liked your story. ^-^

Haha Great story! Loved the rules and all your pages im going to go see more of your storys :D

awesome job
i love it

This was a very funny fic. I think you should do another "5 Rules" fanfic, but I suggest that whenever you write the dialogue, you should sometimes say who is speaking; your neglect in this area with this fic made the dialogue really confusing as to who was speaking at any particular moment.

Keep up the good work!

very funny. I Like It! Keep going! Sorry the verbal thing comes and goes with me.

haha. good story so far, it sounds cute!! plz update soon!! XD please n thankyou!!

Write More!

m cookie yum. oh ya funny story can't wait for more. p.s. send non-postal quadrupal chocolate chip cookies. ^__^

lol update soon, was funny i feel it the chappy could be longer/better though.