It's really well written for sure, I really like this so far and I can't wait to see what happens next. All I want to really say is that you write in 1st person point of views very well.

Very good beginning! I hope you continue this story - the hint sjus tmake me want to read more ^^

please dont continue this i love this fic UPDATE!

I like this fic. its very exciting keep it up.

Not very many stories with Su, please continue.

A nice look into Su's life. While the stalking scene did get a little dry, you did well with the breakfast and dinner scenes. Good first chapter and keep it up!

that's very good, a few spelling errors (keitarou=keitaro celebate=missed the 'r' key)
also, you forgot the 'most important' part of su's room for her, the banana trees. lol
keep up the good work.
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