Woah.
That's probably even more detailed than what Stephenie Meyer had in mind when she wrote about it.
Good job!

this is an amazing look into jake's mind.

love the story u shuld write more!

Wow... poor Jacob. That was amazing! I can really believe he thought all of that. Great job!

Emma

I like your explanation on what it must have felt like to phase for the first time, seems very realistic.

Very nice!

holy *^#&.
i don't have anything to say.
brilliant and wow. omg. *&%#.
this is... amazing. lol. and that doesn't even cover it.
wow.
v bj

omg! that was so jake! it was perfect! i dunno... its all there in one story. awesome job! one of ur best for sure.

Short, sweet and to the point. You never fail to impress.

More please!

Aw, so good, and so sad~ good job! I HEART JACOB

aww... how sad... well not really sad... maybe more like depressing... i don't know... but if i keep reading stories about jacob like this, i might start to like him... jacob bothers me... he's annoying but i loved the story!

that was good im not a big jacob fan but its stories like these that make me feel bad for him

Very well written. You can actually continue this story. It sets it up for any reader just coming in. Even if they don't know about twilight, this is an attractive point of view. I will check out Be my escape. Please keep writing!

Whoaness. So much emotion and thought. I loved, loved, loved it. Great job. =D

This was just so freaking awesome. I love the way you write Jake. :]