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Reviews For: My Girl

twin*muse 2007-09-18 ch 1,	abusemiscarrages just...suck. No other way around it. my mom had one before my older brother...then when I came around, there was a bonus! my twin sis!! Two for the price of one...so it all evened out. Great story. Heidi is adorable and Bug is hilarious. ~Colly E. of twin*muse
csimiamifreako 2007-08-10 ch 1,	abuseAW... THIS STORY IS SO SWEET! THE BEGINNING SAD, THE ENDING HAPPY! REALLY GREAT FIC, BEAUTIFULLY WRITEN! LOVED IT! TALLIEGH FOREVER ...ADDING TO MY FAVS!
zelda49 2007-07-25 ch 1,	abuseI almost passed by this because of the length--I wasn't in the mood to read anything that took me longer than a couple of minutes. But I'm so glad that I changed my mind. This was extremely well done, full of heartache and hurt and sweetness and love all at the same time. I still feel like I don't know Speed all that well yet (I'm new to the Miami scene), but it's clear that you do. Great work!
Jessica237 2007-07-17 ch 1,	abuseThis was excellent. Wonderful. All your emotions were spot-on, your imagery and word choice were spectacular as always, and it was just all around perfect, basically. I don't usually like first person fics, but you write them so, so well. :) I found this especially heartbreaking - '“Daddy?” she asked. “Is Mommy gone?” “She is, sweet pea,” I told her, bending down to scoop her up when I saw her lower lip start to quiver. Heidi began to cry then, her hot tears soaking through my t-shirt. At least one of my girls could still cry on my shoulder.' You've written Heidi extremely well. I felt so bad for her, thinking it was her fault Cal left. And this - "Every night when she speaks to Calleigh, she promises never to cry again if Calleigh will just come home." Aww... :( On a happier note, this made me chuckle - '“Were you and Daddy going to pick up tomorrow or is he telling a tale?” “A tale,” Heidi mumbled, ratting me out without a moment’s thought.' Heh. And then Tim's jealousy over Michael, only to find out that Michael wanted her to meet his boyfriend, heh. I love jealous Tim, especially when it turns out he's jealous for no reason at all. ;) This was absolutely wonderful, and I'm so glad you gave them a happy ending. I can only imagine how much they deserved it. :)
calleighsthebest 2007-07-16 ch 1,	abusewow! That was awesome! I loved it! i'm so glad it ended happy!
randomwriting 2007-07-15 ch 1,	abuseExcellent piece of writing - completely captured me. I truly loved the story. Wonderful portrayal of Tim drowning in emotion, trying so hard to keep his head afloat, yet always aware of the fact that he was nonetheless sinking. My heart broke for him, for all of them. Some of my favorite bits... '...the last time I had been secure in believing that our love could weather any storm.'Such a poignant line and so true because isn't that what everyone believes? '...two small shiny objects on the dresser, and I shut my eyes and sighed. They were just one more thing I couldn’t bear to see.' I could feel the weight of his heartache in those lines. I knew immediately what they were and my heart brokje for him. 'The realization that Calleigh is gone is always followed by the memory of her leaving, a memory that is still too sharp to poke at, even after a month’s time.' More heartbreak... 'I didn’t say anything. Disagreeing with her wouldn’t keep her from going, and disagreeing was all that we’d been doing for the past month.' I wanted him on his knees finally grasping how much pain she was in and begging her to stay. And you know he wanted to do the exact same thing, but instead he wallows in his own emotional stew, seeing the light too late... '...but when it came to Calleigh, I’d done a lot of foolish things.' '...should have given her my shoulder to soak with tears instead of a pillow.' This part was bringing a tear to my eye. Really nice job of fleshing Heidi out and giving her distinct, yet realistic characteristics. I just loved discovering how she was Tim's girl through and through, yet fiercely attached to her mother, something neither parent realized until mommy wasn't there. '“We didn’t have any waffles while you were gone,” Heidi complained, pouting as if I’d forced her to eat brussell sprouts every day, while conveniently forgetting that we’d made banana splits just two days previous.' This line had me snickering. That's exactly how kids are. I love jealous Tim. And I loved the homecoming, especially when he gave her the rings back. aww... 'No longer would I go to bed alone, tossing and turning and waiting for Calleigh to join me, because she was right by my side.' Just perfect! And so was the story. :) Beautifully written, thoroughly enjoyable. BTW - loved the title. :)
Space-Case7029 2007-07-15 ch 1,	abuseGood story. Enjoyed it. Funny about the unnecessary jealousy.
speedfanatic05 2007-07-15 ch 1,	abuseSarah, This was exsquiste! I read slowly so that I could take in everything, every feeling, every fear, every doubt that their situation had posed. My heart truly went out to Tim in Calleigh's absence; how he tried desperately to be both Mom and Dad to Heidi without knowing for sure if she was going to return. At one point, I wasn't sure she was going to return, with the way she left, words left unspoken. I would like to think that in Tampa, she had a moment to get away and to focus better. Calleigh's homecoming was sweet though, in the fact that it wasn't exactly planned. I could just feel the relief that washed over Tim as he opened the door to see her standing there. I couldn't help but read with a smile on my face. I love how you wrote it in first person. It made it seem all the more intimate, personal. Excellent work on that! And of course, the imagery was superb, describing Heidi, even how Tim felt at Calleigh's absence was absolutely astounding. Excellent work, Sarah!
SincerelyInDenial 2007-07-15 ch 1,	abuseThis was delightfully different from the usual S/C fics in more ways that one ... which, in my opinion is quite refreshing. I think you did a wonderful job exploring Tim's emotions as he deals with so many problems all at once. My favorite part (meaning my heart simply broke at this point: "I knew Calleigh hadn’t meant to leave her wedding bands behind, but it stung just the same. I’d been worried that she wouldn’t come back for them – or me." Though she was back at that point, the worry that Tim had, I had throughout the story but I am glad that there was a happy ending. Great great fic. I am quickly adding it to my faves.
AshCarroll aka ShadowDiva 2007-07-15 ch 1,	abusesigh Aww. Sweet and angsty. Nice work. :D

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