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| Rosa Lui 2008-09-18 ch 5,  | abuseLOVE THIS! |
| kenni no. 1 2008-08-13 ch 5, | abusehmm, i actually like this. this is rather good. i'm pleasantly pleased by the consistency and coherence on technique. i love the mystery of whom yoshio's father is. i'm still guessing who he is this far into the story. i really like the inclusion of the back-stories of the teammates, it gives more depth and reality to them. you handle the rookie9+teamGai very well. i look forward to the suna mission. kenni |
| SnowCharms 2008-07-30 ch 5, | abuseWell this will be interesting...i just hope that Team Gai will make it home safely...update! |
| limegreenlollie 2008-07-08 ch 1, | abuseAwesome story! I can't wait for the next chapter. |
| dr. sluice 2008-06-22 ch 5, | abuseLovely story. |
| UglyXXDuckling 2008-06-19 ch 5, | abuseLove it! Can't wait for the update! XOXOXOXO |
| NessieGG 2008-05-26 ch 5, | abuseThis story is really addicting! I hope to see more soon. - Nessie |
| faerichylde 2008-05-08 ch 2, | abuseI like Yoshio; kind of a Neji and Tenten mix, I mean, he is their child: right? |
| neji girl 2008-04-22 ch 4, anon. | abusereally good fic..keep it up. i think i already know who the daddy is i think update already!! |
| swartzvald 2008-03-27 ch 5, | abuseIt's quite good, but try to put somthing in to indicate scene changes, a row of stars or 0-0, somthing. |
| the Dunebird's Cache 2008-03-10 ch 4, | abuseMOAR! Man oh man, I hope you update soon. I've been sucked in already, and it is painful having reached the last chapter update. I hope Yoshio's daddy is indeed Kanky. I've got a soft spot for Tenten/kankurou. I love the characterizations of Kiba- adorable! and who cares what Tsunade thinks, Akiko is truly a fighter, in spirit if not taijutsu. I'd like to see more development of Naruto later. Doesn't seem quite like he's actually trying to get his team to improve teamwork. I couldn't even tell if the bell test he gave them actually taught them anything about teamwork... did it? All in all, I hope to see more of this story!! |
| ocha 2008-03-02 ch 5, anon. | abuseOh no! The next chapter isn't up yet! Such suspense... I gotta know who Yoshio's father is! |
| sophia666 2008-02-27 ch 5, | abuseGreat story. Please update soon, I love team naruto. And what will happen with Tenten, Lee and Neji? Great writing. Please update soon. |
| Cheese Maiden 2008-02-14 ch 5, | abuseI came across this story, and wanted to tell what a great story it's. I really want to know who Yoshio's father is. But Akiko is one of the best OC in the Narurto world. It's so sad the life she has lived. Hopefully Yoshio and her will become friends. The trip to Suna sounds like it will be interesting. |
| Jayfairchild 2008-02-11 ch 5, | abuseAnother amazing chapter! I must say I love Akiko, she's totally awsome! Though that's probably just my bookwrom-self talking. Can't wait to see what happens next. I love how you made Kiba too, so funny! |