This is an amazing story! Keep up the good work!

This is a guilty pleasure fic for me.

I mean, the idea of an assassin school is frankly absurd, and Kai is everything I hate in Stupid!Harry, but I still like it. There's logical inconsistencies here and there, smart people acting quite stupid, secrets being dropped all over the place, and so forth.

But I still like it.

Your Voldemort is, quite frankly, terrible. He doesn't do much but sit back, scream "Crucio!" or tell his underlings to kill, torture, and maim. That's boring.

Kai is full of irritating character traits. For one, he thinks of himself as honorable, and does the assassin thing for a garbage reason. He talks too much about himself to people he doesn't have a reason to trust at all.

On the plus side, it isn't butt love with Snape. Just mildly creepy, "OMG SQUEE SNAPE IS SO COOL!" love.

Great Story! I like the originality. Can't wait for more updates.

I like the way you are developing this story. A mage yes, but not a super powered one...

One thing that contradicts canon- Tobias Snape was an ordinary muggle, and no way in hell would he have got into Riker. Also if the Rikerians use oaths to seal their secrets, wouldn't they do the same for their own language ?

Gryffindor of course! I like the story and the chapter. it is developing well. So yea, he is heir of Gryffindor.

Woot for HONKS!

Please don't have them argue about something stupid again _ I hate it when people do that in stories, just to create tension in the relationship. . There's a war going on, that's enough excitement.

Thank you for sharing this chapter with us :)

Chris

Thanks for the e-mail explaining my question on the wards/stalking and for furthering it a bit in this chapter.

No I didn't think the chapter was too long. In fact it seemed rather short to me, though I suspect that's because I rather enjoyed reading it!

The interplay between the various characters was well written (The only thing missing was a roaring of "CONSTANT VIGILANCE!"). The highlight for me was the meeting and the Kai/Tonks moments; you captured them very nicely.

There's the odd error here and there (if you look hard), that's about the only bad thing I can say!

Anywho, thanks for another chapter and I await to see what you write on your 'ASS' next! (snickers quietly)

Awesome stuff keep it up.

Hey, i really like this chapter, i'm not sure why u dont like it tho...sorry i don't have a lot to say about the chapter, i'm really tired, but i was really good. its like any boring fill-in chapter, minus the borning, all in all i was pleased, lol. (bet u thought i was calling it boring, mawahahahahhaha)

oh btw can i get the chapter early! u know i'm too dumb to figure out what will happen next, plus u've related it to politics... so can i get it anyway, lol

MISS U TOO!

ur biggest fan

o.O a mage! cool story, good premise and great actions scenes so far. i wonder how the romance will go (i liked your suggestion of tonks as being similar to the mirror?). looking forward to updates

great really look like a first pretty good plot too

I liked that chapter. It showed more of Kai's personality and explained some of his background.

Oh. And ignore 'please'.

Seriously, if you're going to flame someone, at least have the class to either sign in and do it, or leave an email address.

Not using proper punctuation, and capital letters as needed also makes the flamer sound like an idiot. If they can't even capitalize "I", what gives them the right to critique someone else's work?

And if you're going to say "youve written him as gay as hell", at least give an example of what exactly you're talking about because the hell serves close to no purpose in the phrase. The only purpose it serves is to make you sound like a middle schooler trying to sound cool but instead makes he or she sound uncouth.

But enough of my ranting. Just excuse and ignore the poor fool's comments, devilblondie.

-C. Sardothien

Hmm...

Kai. Political Power. Besides Boy Who Lived. Besides Riker council.

He's friends with the Minister?

Wait...

He's a mage! That's got to be worth something other than just power. Right?

Plus, he's got to have some politicians as friends.

Being an assassin should make you some good money.

Money Politician as friends.

Not to mention some politicians play dirty and kill off their opposition.

Kai could probably call in favors if he really needed to...

-C. Sardothien

I like how you're progressing on this story very much. I was unsure about your first chapter, and I'd not taken a look at the additions until now. I hope we get a lot more Kai/Severus interaction. I know you're not doing slash, but there are a world of interactions possible for friends and colleagues. I like stories where Severus is a strong, good man and we see behind the mask he has had to wear to cover his spying. I hope your schedule and muse will allow you to write and post more chapters sometime soon. Keep up the good work. Zafaran {mailto:} zafaran {at} fastmail {dot} fm