I am by no means a Aya/Tooya fan (;) but I feel that this had some potential. The story needs to be thought out a bit more, however. It just states the same thing of “we are together,” and “we will win,” And why will they win? “Because we are together.” A bit repetitive, don’t you think? And the thing with “Nothing, nothing,” “Destiny, our destiny,” and “Everything, everything.” I understand what you were trying to get across, but try not using it after the already repetitive “we will win.” A spell check would help, too. I’m not trying to be mean, I’m trying to give constructive criticism so that you may polish up this piece and make it better. _ Good luck! Ja! *Winks and blows a kiss* .