 GoldenMerlin 2007-07-17 . chapter 1Aww. That's a really sweet story! Although I think it was a little rushed. They just spilled their feelings for each other. Next thing you know, they're calling each other honey and running away. Somehow it fit the scene, though. I don't know: when you think about it, it seems rushed, but when you read it, it seems fine.
I think you could worm this into the book: That was the real reason he ran away, but he didn't want to tell his English teacher , or something. Or was it already intended to be like that, and I just didn't catch on? |