update soon! the story is interesting dont give up on it!

A few grammatical errors, but better now that you have quotation marks. I mean a lot better.

The plot is getting interesting. Very interesting. I'll give this chapter an 8.5 Keep it up!

I relly relly like this story I love XJ please keep writing

or 'll get depressed...again

i like inner and jin inner are funny...

Yes! Miharu... oh Jin have a serious problem on his hands now... now i really can't wait for an update...

Miharu Rock!

LOVE IT! update soon! :)

Oh wow... Law XD... didn't see that coming!... awesome chapter love the playfulness they had going on.. thers's not much of that happening in fics these days... nice to see them acting like normal teens in love..

Lol Jin fan club and xiao's fan club joined forces.. may the force be with you Lol (star wars)

P.S... LMAO.. God i don't know why i found that so funny.. but yeah you have to check your account or else it would just over flow Lol...

*can't wait for more*

Awesome... yeah it really is nothing like your first kiss.. mine was just awful.. oh well still memorable

and good thing red didn't kiss her.. that would have been just wrong on all levels...

Xiaoyin first kiss..sweet.. now their first fight shouldn't be far behind.. i don't think Jin is so innocent i feel there's much more to him than he's leading people to believe.. Hmph never had a girl friend but knows how to kiss... (sure)

What else is it that you're not telling us JIN? XD

i like it. A few grammer mistakes...well alot but still pretty good

There are such things as quotation marks. You hardly had any, if any at all!

lol.. nice... Inner talon... (what do you mean nice?.. it was freaking great) XD Hmm can't wait for the adventures to begin.. i have a feeling pervert Ling.. Err i mean inner Ling is going to be a little more edgier in the coming chapters.. hope Jin can handle her...

P.S yeah Jin is my favorite he just own*

Great start, Inner Jin remind me of Devil Jin XD.. and inner Ling is such a naughty girl... Hmm Interesting

And i got the Image from Msn they have tons of freakishly awesome pictures... update soon!

Grammatically speaking, you had quite a few errors. The Inner Ling concept sounds interesting though. I'll give this story a 7.5 First and foremost, for the second chapter, revise it and check for grammatical errors, and the story will already be a bit better.