I'm enjoying your story and look for more chapters. After drill scene, can there be a dialogue between F'lar and F'nar, also F'lesson with J'ral trying to figure how this rider/dragon team knows when and where the threads will fall, and how much is his dragon? And are impressions by the other rider's dragons involved? Then, involved through who's eyes is he seeing the vast space? What senses used. Is it the breezes, a change in pressure? Does he see the unseen? If he does is it a different color? What? Can he explain what he does, teach werlings? Keep going with your story, please!
As Jameth took flight,HE contacted [this bit was a little unclear], does J'ral request it of Jameth to relay where the practice strands are to be dropped...but hey he and his dragon think and speak as one entity...is this his trick? Is J'ral more dragonlinkthinking than most? I think so, then his dragon's instinctive responses...hm

You have been paying more attention to detail, however, we are still lacking emotions and faces. That is a good way to practice.

Cool... Watch out for too many "was" and "were" in your sentences... Also you use the word "got" too much... Just a personal bugbear from my day-job. "Got" is fine used in dialogue, in my opinion, as that is how people speak but I try and substitute it with other words that have similar meanings in my narrative.

This is a good concept. The writing, however, needs some work. You seem to change tenses at random. I am pleased to see that you gave the incompetent wingleader a name. You are also lacking in visual imagery concerning your characters. I also think it's redundant to refer to Brekke as F'nor's wife. Everyone who's read the books knows this is the case. The pace and flow of the story is excellent. And the story itself, the meat of it, so to speak, is unique and entertaining. And it does not break canon as so many others here seem to. look forward to seeing chap 7.

It is working now. If the wingleader was lazy, I wonder, why he was made a wingleader. Maybe you could give him a name, it won't make much difference, but it seems odd to call him 'the other person'. I am still wondering how J'ral control his ability. He could try going to Southern Continent. I like your story. But there is a lack of imagery and environment. you have a lot more of that now than in the beginning, but I still think you could use more, like how the bathchamber and the weyr and meeting room look. The expressions on the people's faces. I hope to see the next chapter soon.

I can not see Ch. 5. It refuses to show text.

How unfortunate that J'ral can't use his ability to save himself.

keep on writing. i was hoping for a bit more detailed explanation for J'ral's abiltiy, but I suppose there would be no better explanation for teh unexplainable. I want to see him in action.

You will continue the other story, yes? For this one I think I am confused. If J'ral can predict where the thread will fall, why does he not catch them? Or do you not mean that by "predicting the pattern of thread"?

Good going, you've introduced a wonderful situation for a character. A nit-pick from my side: "got" is a horrible word that I advise most of my writers to erase from their vocab unless ABSOLUTELY necessary. What was said to J'ral in the kitchen? I'd also hazard to say that there'd be more dialogue between J'ral and his dragon. Or at least I find myself wanting to see more of it. Other than that, just more descriptions of people, what they look like... the weather... that sort of thing.I think your writing is of a very high standard, however.