Sorry I couldn't resist. I just read this again and I'm wondering right now...Does Axel know something? Hm...

augh.

your vague yet tantalizing descriptions are just wonderful! ♥♥
m, charred corpses are a fun idea, especially with the tag embedded in him.
also, the phrase "tummybutton" made me smile.

-oh!
and the way axel is so excited is disturbing but just /enthralling/ at the same time.

=]
good job.
i look forward to future chapters!

This seems very weird but very good at the same time. I'm not sure if Riku is supposed to be a zombie or running away from the government or what, but you've made me curious.

I also like the short, choppy sentences.

ASDFGHJKL.

You are too awesome for words.

I am in awe.

Totally waiting for another update.

ohdearohdear. Riku seems to have gone through an ordeal. (and considering the first chapter, it will not end nicely.) was riku kidnapped and tortured? and, if i read right, was supposed to be left dead. 'cept axel found him.

hm. noticed the change to the secondary genre "crime." this will be interesting. :O

love the description "paper-rice skin" and "slick iron" and just you in general.

more, yes? yes? ♥

-RA, out

I like the last line, it was, charming. XD

dude!
that was amazing.
i loved it.
you have a very elegant writing style, dude.

:3 Thank you for delivering another amazingly-written chapter. ^__^
@_@ UPDATE AGAIN~! X3 It's such a...smooth, if you could call it that...writing style.

:3 Deep-fried Corpsicles are fun.

Gorgeous.

Every word in this is refreshing and simple.
It makes me ever so excited.

Excellent word choice. The latin in the story description however, is mangled.

axel, why, why, why are you pulling a dead guy into your jeep instead of being sensible? i'm assuming axel either had car troubles and stopped and found him (going by the "now" and "then," i'm presuming this happens before the funeral), or he was almost hit/was hit by another car or he hit the dead guy. lawl.

so short. MORE PLZ.

C-O-R-P-S-E-F-U-C-K-I-N-G

&&hearts!

you are a swell lass.
i want an update now plz?

M? What happened to Riku? Short Short updates make me sad. I have been too spoiled with long chapters lately it seems. Pretty Pretty dead person.