Put a gun to your head and fire. God will be happy and so will my eyes!

Look I know you're trying to be funny but jesus christ, mary mother of god, You are one psychotic bastard. What the f*k were you thinking? And all the people encouraging him? Okay, this is what keeps people from creative ideas. This style is overused and disgusting. You and whatever devil spawn minions who work like you should go back to the fiery pits of Preschool.
~J88

I honestly don't know how people can say that your stories are good because I can't even read it. I was in first grade writing better than this, honestly. If you can't write at all, get some help, please. This is a shame to the fandom.

ok that last line made me cry i was laughing so hard. Kasper A. Vestergaard, i will forever be a fan of your great literature!

Dude, you need to get a life and stop killing our fandom.

liek omg this is good! i hop i kan rite liek u wun day!

THIS IS THE BEST STORY EVAR! GREAT PLOT AND SPELLING! A+

Oh, Mew, give me patience.
I am desperately hoping that the simple monstrosity that this story is, is intentional. If not, sigh, here I go being grammar/spell checker again.
I'll go in order:
1. 'Ash' is spelt like that, not "Asch".
2. Names, Pokemon names, human names, attack names, place names, they all start with a capital letter.
3. "One" day, not 'on' day.
4. If a word starts with a vowel, it should be 'an' instead of 'a', such as 'an apple' and 'a grape'.
5. Adventure is spelt as such and not adventere.
6. Because, not becuz.
7. Was, not waz.
8. Trouble, not troble.
9. "Wrong" is spelt as such and not 'rong' which is wrong.
10. Saffron! Saffron City! Two spelling mistakes in as many words! Yeesh! Not 'safon sity'. Mew, give me patience, this is ten errors and that's only the first line. And it's not even done!
11. Other, not oter.
12. Route, not rout.
13. Really, not rly.
14. They, not tey.
15. Couldn't needs that 'l' and the apostrophe.
16. Wild, not wyld.
17. Pokeball. It needs the 'e'! Oh, and somehow, you spelt 'threw' correctly.
18. Will needs two 'l's.
19. Help, not halp.
20. Rescue, not rescuw.
21. Said, not sed.
22. Then, not ten. Have already said that one?
23. Came, not caym.
24. Was, not wuz. Didn't you misspell that differently earlier?!
25. That, not tat.
26. Dumb, not dum. I'll let you off the hook for that one, because the 'b' is silent.
27. Didn't needs that apostrophe.
28. like, not liek, wherever the hell that word came from. No, don't tell me, I really don't want to know.
29. What, not wat.
30. Attack, not attakc, although that one is possibly a typo.
31. It's just ran, rather than ranned, which I assume you were trying to spell.
32. Fell not feel in this context.
33. Hole, not whole.
34. Died, not diyd, and that is completely random.
35. Rbcok? Where the hell did that come from? I can't even translate what that should be.
36. Laughed, not laffed.
37. Kept, not keeped, which you were attempting, and failing, to spell.
38. The rest of the sentence is so messed up it's barely readable. I'm not even going to bother trying to translate it. You have got to know where you went wrong there.
39. Team, not teem.
40. Rocket, not rocte, and both "Team" and "Rocket" should have capital letters at the start.
41. Meowth, not moewt.
42. James, not Jmeas.
43. Have, not heva.
44. You, not yuo.
45. Must only has one 's'.
46. Give, not gve.
47. Pikachu, not pikchu or pickachu or any other wierd spellings you see fit to create.
48. Remembered, not remberd.
49. Leiked? What the hell? Liked! Sheez! What your story will not be if you keep this up!
50. More, not moar.
51. "I'll" needs that apostrophe as it is an abbreviation.
52. You, not u. Do not use chatspeak or many people will be after your blood. Just a warning, there.
53. Jessie, not Jesy.
54. Remembered, not memberd!
55. There is general bad grammar in that sentence and I'm not even going to try to clear it up.
56. Ditto, not ditoe, or dittoe. Sorry, but that is pathetic.
57. Made, not made, look, not lock, and like, not leik, AGAIN!
58. Gave, not geave.
59. Thanks, not tanks.
60. For, not four, and that usually only confuses people straight out of grade two.
61. It should be "because", and not the shortened and misspelled version cuz.
62. Thought, not tought.
63. Would, not wuld.
64. I am going to ignore the completely dreadful chatspeak and nonexistant grammar right there and just point out, it's some, not sum, and coffee, not cofe.
65. I. Am. Not I are, which you were obviously attemtping.
66. You are or you're, not ur.
67. Right, not rite.
And I have completely run out of tolerance to even try to point out the mistakes in that last line.
Onto the big things:
This story has no plot.
This story is full of random things that would have nothing to do with the plot, should it even have one.
The characters are not in character, they are weird strangers bearing the names of the people from the anime.
The overall idea is stupid.
When a new person starts speaking, start a new line.
The vocabulary is questionable at best.
And you had better hope those grammar and spelling errors were intentional, or I would seriously go back to whoever taught you English and get your money back, because this is not English.
Oh, Celebi, I only just saw that. How can you not spell the name of the original Pokemon world?! Kanto! Kanto, Kanto, Kanto! Not cantoe!
Overall, this is the worst story I've ever met.
And I wasn't joking about getting your money back. Whoever your teacher was, they didn't do their job!
Honestly, I think you need to watch the anime to get an idea of what the characters are actually like, and take a serious crash course on how to speak English.
I am sorry to be so critical if those were honest mistakes, but seriously, get an editor.
Twin2, over and out.

I'm going to be blunt and inform you that this story is horrid.
The grammar needs a lot of improvement since most of the words are either spelled wrong or used improperly.

oh...my...god...
where to begin? your story has no plot, absolutely everyone is ooc, and im even having doubts that this is written in english at all.
quite frankly, you suck.
sorry for the flame, but it needed to be said.
its a little better(but not alot) if you ment for it to suck.

I take it this is supposed to be intentionally bad.

...right?

I have to agree...your english is, well, terrible. There is no plot and you didn't even use indentations. Its also way too short. I suggest you learn some grammar and spelling if you want to become a writer someday, and if you want someone to think your stories are good. Heck, your name is a lot harder to spell than "Ash".

Everyone's out of character, the plot is practically nonexistent and you have mutilated the English language in a way I never thought possible.

Learn to write, work out some sort of plot and watch more Pokemon to see what the characters are really like. Once you've done that, give it another go.