Not bad, though it does get a bit redundant in the last chapter.

These are all pretty redundant after a while... -now reading Vexen's-

Nifty cadence. It suits Xemnas pretty well.

aw...*sniffle* please update sooner. And please make Demmy-chan all angst about his mask/pretense and music and drowning...

know what? I'll probably make a Demyx tribute soon. Stupid muses always have to wake up when i gots NO TIME!1!

Aw...Zezzy is emo...or angst...or just really, REALLY depressed...

I love those last few lines, about 'fated to fall.'

...Gr.
I really am obsessed with angst, huh?

anger, ashes, heat, fire
a steady heartbeat is what we desire
i lost my heart and found a friend
separated, we never saw each other again
flurry of dancing flames
my steady heartbeat never came
all thirteen were fated to fall
the others at the keyblade's call
without hearts but still alive
no emotion and yet they thive
soon they will die
thrown into darkness by their lie...

lol got a little carried away...might sound like crap but oh well...teehee im bored!

This is very good, you captured their personalities very well, except Xemnas isn't the Enigmatic Man, he's the Superior (That's his real title), but it doesn't really matter. Keep going!

Wow, how creative. I look forward to the next update.

I figured I'd read your fanfic on account of you're my only review so thx and keep up the ood work

Nice! cant wait for larxene!

Amazing! And it's very fitting!

Please write more!!

Niceo!