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Cerberuxs 2008-10-12 ch 9,	abuseVerygood story and much more realistic with tha way harry adquired his skill and knowledge. keep going
DoubleTime 2008-10-08 ch 9,	abuseHere Here! I like both Ginny/Harry and the ones where Ginny is a sycopath. :D If there was one character I would love to see in your story it would be Luna. She's just so much fun! Your story is really good!!
razorwind02 2008-10-08 ch 9,	abuselove the new chapter, actually the whole story, keep it up...as for "mistakes" that ppl are pointing out its a fanfiction written for entertainment(excellent by the way) its not going to be the same as the book, and the sooner they realize this the better the can appreciate it, its going to be ocness's when it comes to major characters, so i just wanted to say love the story can't wait for the new chapter and keep it up
ChristinaAngel 2008-10-04 ch 9,	abuseGood chapter! I liked Remus and Sirius meeting Harry and the stories they told. I also like how Hermione was introduced and I'm so glad that she and Harry aren't going to be a couple. I also liked how Snape and Sirius are getting along. A small request though? Please could you set Remus up with Tonks in the future please? I love them together and they are really well suited. Thanks for updating!
y 2008-10-03 ch 9, anon.	abuseLove it! !
Alex 2008-10-03 ch 9, anon.	abuseThis looked like a good story. Too bad you are making Ginny Mary-Sueish, though. I always wonder why authors feel like they have to do this. What is so wrong with her being a fairly average girl?
Amber Pegasus 2008-10-02 ch 9,	abuseI enjoyed it. Please update real soon.
OwlofNight 2008-10-02 ch 9,	abuseNice base idea,ill see how it turns out.
Dustin B. AKA DusandDan 2008-10-01 ch 9,	abuseYAY LONG LIVE THE CANON COUPLES!
mudbloodpotter05 2008-10-01 ch 9,	abusei love this story! it has everything i like in it and it just gets better with every chapter. and i for one am glad that you are having harry/ginny. and her being a prodigy in those areas is very much her. good choice. now i am wondering if harry will continue to use the 'wand' or will he be given a wand without a core? his wand does look different then that of his peers... okay next thing...the lady...i have no idea who she is but it never hurts to guess... 1-Lily Potter; 2-One of the Lady Founders; 3-Morgana le Fay; which i think it is (Morgan) 4-Ebanyd; you mentioned her a few times and you told us that this person is a she, and ebanyd is a she... if i got it right are you going to tell me? ha ha anyway good luck with the next chapter and i really can't wait to read it. mudbloodpotter
zeynel 2008-10-01 ch 9, anon.	abuseLove tis nw part! *grins It was fun seng te meeting between Harry and his "uncles", and hewa he beriendedHermione!
Millie Johanson 2008-09-30 ch 9, anon.	abuseHello, I have just found your story and read your Bio and will read it just because you are doing a H&G story I always give them a chance. Good luck and keep writing... I was coping a story and the author was so nasty about he would put Harry with anyone but Ginny... Thank I love H&G stories... Miss Millie
Lady Squish 2008-09-30 ch 9,	abuseyea! you updated. I'm so excited. I really do love this story. keep up the good work.
bandgsecurtiyaw 2008-09-30 ch 9,	abuseNice work.
beckysue904 2008-09-30 ch 9,	abuseI definitely like the story line, but as you've mentioned people complaining of grammar, I would like to say that it is grammar, a bit. But more than that, I think it's your word choice. For instance, when you say "don't doubt in telling me" this is definitely not something that native English speakers say to sound correct. Normally it would be "don't hesitate to tell me", right? If English is your first language, then you really need to learn this. I don't know if English is your first language or not, but even if it isn't it might be good to pay attention for future reference. If it isn't, it totally is not your fault. At any rate, assuming you were a native English speaker (since that is what people will think, I'll go from there) it rather sounds like you're getting words from a thesaurus for variety or to sound smart, but instead it makes the sentences disjointed and (sorry) makes you sound unintelligent. Improper usage is worse than just using simple words. Using simple words is never a bad thing. Another thing I've noticed that has a similar effect is your use of a word that would sound fine, but then you use a strange tense or form the sentence in a way that makes it sound awkward. In one case, near the beginning, you said: “They only hope that you are able to remind* it by your second week,” the other twin said. For that sentence, it flows better if you say "They only hope you won't need to be reminded by your second week." or if you changed it completely, keeping the former sentence, you would simply say remember it. Sorry if I sound so critical, but a lot of the time, that's what really makes me decide if I want to read it or not. It's already a huge compliment that I've read it through the end (as it is) because I really like the premise and the ideas behind the story. On a different note, Arthur Weasley was a muggle enthusiast. He had no real knowledge. At the very least, he would have mispronounced computer—if he even knew what it was. I understand it would be very difficult to find someone for that department, but a Weasley would be a poor choice because they’re purebloods, and really don’t know anything about muggles. That is why Mr. Weasley is so eager to learn, and likes to hear Hermione tell him about them. If he truly knew, like muggleborns do, he wouldn't be an enthusiast because he would know all about them. Therefore, his interest is more in learning than anything. Also, instead of extending your sentences with commas, parentheses and dashes, if you make them into shorter, precise sentences, then they would be less confusing. I understand the urge to fit as much as you possible can into one sentence, as I used have a major problem with it. It still slips out sometimes, unfortunately. The main problem with it is that even if you understand the sentence, it can be confusing to others, and make you story seem weaker. (That is impossible to translate from an essays argument to a story, but it is as necessary for a fiction as an essay to convince your reader… something. Started out strong and lost it. Don’t do that.) Other than that, though, I thought that you did a wonderful job throughout the story of picking his genius. It might be just a bit over the top, but if I didn't like reading about it, I wouldn't have read however many thousands of words this is. My favorite accomplishments to read about would definitely have to be the MagMachine and the list of magical elements, because they are believable, and something needed to be done by someone with the intelligence and experience of both magical and muggle worlds. It also needed a separate enough outlook of both to not give it up as impossible without even trying. I'm sorry, this is so long, and it sounds so critical, but I really do like this story, it's just that I think it would be even better if you could fix up you grammar so that it enhances the story, rather than getting in the way of it. Good luck, and keep up the good work!

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