ah, my first RoarkxRiley fic i've ever read~

lol poor Riley!

Jeez, Onix. Ah well. Nicely written... and will this tie into anything from the DP games? Just wondering...

WADR,
Loli

lol these are two of my favorite characters in the new game, and someone actually made them into a paring x3
you are awesome! xD

Great story so far!

I can honestly say it's good to finally find someone else whom I did not convince that RileyxRoark=OTP. Who speaks English anyway.

Anyway, the majority was well done with excellent descriptions. I can tell that you are not a dialog whore. That paragraphs seems a little odd with the sound effect randomly in the paragraph. But then again, I'm a breakwhore as well, so that's probably just me.

PS, are all chapter titles going to be named after ice creams, nyoro~n?

Wow, this story has a really cool plot/twist to it! I can't wait to see what this story develops into :D

CRAP! I can't believe you would say that. I thought it was funny so don't sell yourself short. I love it as much as I love the DNA story. I made it as the first reviewer! Whoot! Hmm... What else to say.. Oh yes even though I don't know a damn thing about the game I could follow it. -grins- Poor Roark though. It really wasn't it day. I think this is the longest review you ever got from me. Good luck and try to update soon. I can help you with ideas if you need. I just don't know how much help I'll be. You will be my first story alert. Feel the love!

~Kradnohikari (I felt like doing this hehehehe)