Ok, now more then once someone has said in there fic that all Californians are perfectly tanned. Well, I'm a proud resident of the OC and I'm butt white as all my friends will tell you (LOL). Anyway, awesome. i love hearing whats going on in Carder's head. First person was a good choice in this circumstance.

O, I like. I always was for Carder/Lucy. And the characters on right on the money.

Not cheesy at all. It was appropriately poignant. Please keep writing. ) The only thing I can suggest is a sequel.

What a heart breaker! Please continue!

Hello, I love both the characters.

Why don't you try doing an NC-17 version with them?

aww. nice.

That was good. You should continue it.

Liz