Brilliant!! You kept everyone beautifully in character. I love the idea as well. Great Job!

Nice story. Interesting and unique twist, showing the development of their relationship through Penelo's eyes, and how she becomes an "accomplice" to their secret romance. I like how invested she becomes; living vicariously through Ashe to the point where she is moved to openly interfere, insisting on the depth of Balthier's devotion despite his nonchalance in Balfonheim.

I first read this on LiveJournal (except I'm Kiwibear123 over there), and I love it just as much now as I did then... guh. It's so gorgeous! Favourited, of course.

Wow!! This was a REALLY good story!! Awsome job!

I really loved this; it was amazing to see Ashe and Balthier's relationship through the eyes of Penelo. For one, Penelo is young and uncertain of how she feels. It was great for the note that she wasn't even sure how she felt about Balthier and whether it was more about it being Balthier or whether because it was new and thrilling. If she even has to ask, then it's more about the fact that it seems illicit and such. ;) I kinda think it's cool; Penelo's intentions seem to be just keeping things quiet and everything is so new to her, she's practically being thrown head over heels. I'm eager to see the continuation of this, if there is one!

I loved it. You portrayed all the characters so well, and the whole fic really took off at Jahara. I didn't really like the way it ended, but other than that it was pretty much perfect.

Wow this is amazingly written, it's one of my favorites of yours.

Oh yes, I don't think we've been introduced. I'm smoker, and over this past week I've been reading everything you've writen here and am utterly astounded at your talent. I urge you do not waste this. You said in your profile you are just a beginner, if this is true you are a natural and should foster your abilities.

There is a rare balance in your stories, that many beginners do not have, myself included. And your writing goes beyond the fluff of paring characters together to get some sort of silly rock off, it is vary believable.

This story toy's with point of view wonderfully. I can see in your story the truth of how a young girl, like Penelo, would feel confronted with Ashe and Balthier's passion, and reading it was intriguing. Yet the Penelo-view did not lessen the impact of Ashe and Balthier's feelings one bit.

Please continue writing, I am addicted to your prose.

I'll be reviewing more, to be sure.

-Smoker