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QueenOfHearts3 2008-05-08 ch 1,	abusehehe tis cute! =^_^= dont think i ever knew that about termites (or maybe i just forgot lol), but awesome use of the info! checks all the boxes
annie200 2008-03-09 ch 1,	abuseThis was just fantastic..termite telepathy..and it's true!!? And the line about the shirt made me chuckle out loud, especially when Logan was considering firing Bling fro bad-timing. Loved it!
Babyangel86 2007-08-28 ch 1,	abuseloved it! When logan had his little fantasy, and max started to talk, I thought... hm... she's psychic and has caught him out... then you mentioned termite, and I was like hm... maybe not... ... bt then she is... well... in her weird way... ... pretty cool..., specially since it can explain things like "her rpropensity for always chewing gum..." , plus how she knew logan was hurt in BBWW... ... soo good! aah... fluffety fluff fluff!
intstebri 2007-08-13 ch 1,	abuseSorry to have been late for the review. It was a pleasure this brain storming to put a hand on a new idea about Max's skill! I love what you did with that! Logan's thoughts were fantastic, nothing to scare her or made her angry about him or putting Logan in the middle of 'he's a man, you know how think men...'. Just a tiny bit more than innocent in fact (for me, at least) And she responded in kind! So lovely, so almost ashamed, so Max. If I have to pick a preferred sentence, under torture because all the story was delightful, I will go for: " ...and he decided that if this is the way dirty thoughts were rewarded, he would let his mind float down the gutter more often." Bling arrival was so unexpected and so naïve at first ("What's wrong with your windows?") that I smiled widely. Max running away again, as usual, but this time with a promise that make me wondering if, maybe, we will be blessed and you will give us an extra look of one of these twelve days... If I beg? If I send you coffee? Grapefruit... ? Very good story. Very very good story. Thank you very much for your story!
Jeanetteg 2007-08-09 ch 1,	abuseThat's good! What does Max have in mind for the other days, hum... :)
MLFanchick 2007-08-02 ch 1, anon.	abuseTerrific little fic--FUNNY and steamy all at once--just, abolutely perfect!
TigrouAngel 2007-07-25 ch 1,	abuseI told you it's a good story! I told you, I told you, I told you. You know which parts I liked the most, but the "Logan simply stared at his physical therapist, wondering if the man would have grounds to sue him after being fired for really bad timing." line is still killing me! Extremely funny. ...and I'm extremely angry with that I didn't get the alert.
Xihlkage 2007-07-21 ch 1,	abusecute, I liked it. Well done.
BlueAngel137 2007-07-21 ch 1,	abuseAh ... wonderful, beautiful, brilliant! Sigh. Termite DNA - great idea, very funny (wouldn't want to be in Max's shoes and have to admit something like that to a hot man :P) ... and yes, embarrassed Logan is always so cute. :) Favorites: --...Max took that as an opening to begin a potentially interesting conversation. “Logan Cale: All American Boy Scout and future savior of the downtrodden; trying to get to second base with a girl in the back of a parked car? I find myself shocked! Who was she and when did all this parking take place, anyway?” ... (LOL, love that Logan shares this experience with Max and lets his guard down) --...“So if I sign up for this ‘Christmas in July’ thing, do I get a present?” Max asked with a calculating arch of her eyebrow. “Only if you’ve been a good girl,” Logan answered levelly. “I believe the standard rules still apply in the summer months.” “Oh,” she said, knowing that her behavior was generally more naughty than nice and would probably never get her into Santa’s good graces. “Well, maybe next year.” (very funny again, and very Max-like to want a present, love their dialog) --"Well…interesting little side effect: sometimes I can pick up on a person’s thoughts. Not telepathy or anything like that; I just pick up on strong feelings sometimes. It only really works when it’s quiet, and dark, and still…like now…and the emotions are really intense. For example…um…I could feel what you were thinking about me just then,” she finished in another quick rush. Now it was Logan’s turn to be mortified as he remembered the ignoble direction his thoughts had been traveling in moments before. He silently prayed for quick death as he realized Max was aware of the erotic fantasies that featured her in the starring role. Even if she didn’t know exactly what he was thinking, she had felt the strong desire he had for her. He felt like a little boy that had just been caught with a dirty magazine. ... ("he prayed for a quick death" - lol, love the whole part) The kiss was hot. And I absolutely love the ending, it's filled with promises and still keeps that perfect S1 feel. Perfect! --...She stared back at him, shutting out everyone and everything else and forgetting her warm cheeks. She knew exactly what he was feeling, and it had nothing to do with insect communication. She leaned in and whispered in his ear, “Don’t worry, Logan. It’s only the nineteenth; still twelve days until August.” And with a mischievous wink and a burst of agile haste, she ducked out of the car, hopping on her motorcycle and revving the engine. With another embarrassed, private smile just for him, she zoomed off into the night, too distracted to remember to turn on her headlight as she sped off into the night. ... (SO BEAUTIFUL) It's such a great story ... and I'm so glad I saved it for a quiet evening on the balcony instead of racing through this at work. THANKS.
Griever 2007-07-20 ch 1, anon.	abuseOmg, termites! Never in my life... lol. But I loved it! "Logan simply stared at his physical therapist, wondering if the man would have grounds to sue him after being fired for really bad timing." this reminds me so much of Logan's expression in Meow, when Zack interrupts their kiss. Beautiful! I'm loving this Christmas in July thing, so much FLUFF! And feeling very very under pressure now, nearly everyone's got their stories up...
Mari83 2007-07-20 ch 1,	abuseThis made me laugh and smile and think that you deserves some kind of medal for for coming up with a new brownout-scenario and something so happily fluffy that still has that special S1 feeling. Telephatic abilities by termite DNA, this is way better than all the crazy stuff our biology teacher told us. "Max had even forgotten to remind herself that she didn’t give a damn. She actually felt good about herself as they recounted their victory and he applauded her success at getting in and out unnoticed." Nice detail:-) "It was a rare occurrence for him to confide such personal details about himself, especially about his love life, even if it had been so long ago. He talked so little about anything outside of Eyes Only, and she enjoyed the moments when he let his guard down more than she liked to admit." Oh, I’m enjoying them too:-) Also like the contrast of their teenage love experiences. “I know you’ve been enhanced,” he said carefully, his gentle, understanding voice letting her know it was safe to confide any secret with him. " Just so perfectly logan-ish and just imagining him saying this makes me melt. Already too much long quotes, so I’ll just state that I LOVE the kiss (or kisses). I love Christmas in July (and having the thought in DA world too is so fitting for Logan’s ‘seizing every opportunity to celebrate’:-)
shywr1ter 2007-07-19 ch 1,	abuseBoy, I sound demanding, don't I? Well, glad I was, 'cos look what a great story came of it! (and great job getting all of it in, especially given that the rules allowed a "3 of 5" sort of approach!) A great sense of fun in this one, and you have a lot of cool ways of letting us know not only that was going on with the characters but the tone you'll take, with lines like "Max had even forgotten to remind herself that she didn’t give a damn." "Max took that as an opening to begin a potentially interesting conversation." And the way this all developed is really tasty, especially Max's appreciation in learning a bit more about Loogie. But then-- who'd'a thought-- termite DNA? And from there,we get "(h)e felt like a little boy that had just been caught with a dirty magazine." I can just imagine him with his cheeks burning! ;} "Max wasn’t sure why she did what she did next." I do! ;} Smooching! :D But your description of this is very sweet and evocative. M! I'm just wondering how in the world, given the source, Logan kept his shirt on-- I suppose if Bling hadn't wandered up... and speaking of whom-- "What’s wrong with your windows?” he asked as an afterthought." Oh, Bling! You know exactly what's "wrong!" As do we. Lovely gift; lovely story. Thanks! ;}
Moonlite Star 2007-07-19 ch 1,	abuseLOL TERMITE DNA?! That was brilliant! so she has this weird esp vibe going. That was hilarious. The reactions/emotions were perfect! I loved that Bling was oblivious to what was going on initially. GREAT story! :D It's certainly a nice christmas present in july...
Lisa0316 2007-07-19 ch 1,	abuseRevved up with bug ESP? Ok, that was kind of funny. I hope Shy likes it. There's one spot where you used a quotation mark, and I'm not sure if it's gramatically correct. It's too bad you couldn't give it to her to check over first. Oh, well. Oh, and yes, I spotted the Mary Sue reference...

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