This is pretty cool. Poor Danny...

Nice work on the chapter. Very interesting. It's getting intense. So many questions... I can't wait to read what happens when Danny catches up. Evil cliffies...

Sorry I'm not logging in to review, but my internet goes out whenever I try, so this'll have to be "anonymous".

Great chapter! Vlad's still being a creep, and of course poor, unfortunate Daniel is stuck in the middle of it.

Aw crap. Now he's gonna fill Daniel's head with stupid ideas about Danny. Still, Daniel is smart enough to discern what is true and what is a loap of crap...so I shall rely on that hope.

Danny's got to be careful, he's not up to full strength. But everyone's here and ready to fight! The climax approaches! (bounces up and down)

Waiting for the next--no pressure though!
-Dizgirl

And cue dramatic music! You're doing a really nice job showing how the situation is heating up. I can really feel the tension rising, too. It's making me look forward to the climax of this as well as every twist and turn along the way. Nice job!

Gah trust you to end it on a cliff -whaps- Meanie. Post a new chappie son!

I really like the story wish it was a little more Stargate though even just Anubis making a brief confusing mention of a poser pretending to be him or each planet having its own ghost zone or something.

O_O Well, as you can probably tell by my penname, I can't believe I missed this story. Geez, I am ignorant sometimes. :)

Well, you've got quite an interesting story going here. I've tried to crossover DP and SG-1 before and my story didn't turn out quite like this. Not to mention mine is much shorter and discontinued at the moment because I am uninspired, but who knows? Maybe this will inspire me. Anyway, what I'm trying to say is, I really enjoy this take on exactly HOW to crossover the two shows. We know Daniel became an orphan at age 8, so having the Fenton's take him in as a foster child is perfectly believable. I commend you.

With regards to writing style, you're not terrible, but I did spot quite a few problem areas. Some basic ones include the excessive use of the word "kid" to describe Daniel. I realize the difficulty in trying to find synonyms for such a noun, but words like boy, child, young man, or even his name, Daniel, would work better. It's not a continuous hindrance, but there was one point in the story where that was basically the only word you used to describe him. Additionally, when writing stories, the accepted spelling of "ok" is "okay." If you do use the spelling "ok," it should be capitalized. But that is really not too big of a deal. You misspelled "height" twice, I believe, as "hight," so you may want to fix that. Lastly, the only other general problem I spotted was your sparse use of commas. For example, when you say "Hey, Jazz," you should have a comma after the word "hey." But these problems are merely matters of my picky taste, and do not really detract from the plot.

Some more specific errors were when Jazz first spoke: "...she stood up AND greeted." You forgot to put the "and" in the sentence, so it just said, "...she stood up greeted." Also, because the story is in past tense, when Daniel was making observations about Jack and Maddie, you said, "what they do was unclear" and it should be "what they DID was unclear." And, finally (there may be more, but I was so into your plot that I most likely missed some; I'm sure a good proofread would help you locate any further problems), Danny said, toward the end, "Why are you attacking me for?"--This sentence should either say "Why are you attacking me?" or "What are you attacking me for?"

PHEW! Sorry to overwhelm you. That may seem like a lot, but, believe me, you are actually a pretty good writer compared to most on this site. Just keep writing and you'll improve. I sincerely hope you don't mind me informing you of your writing mistakes; I don't mean to make you think I don't enjoy your story. It's very interesting, actually. I just hope to help you improve.

On another note, however, you seem to be a brilliant plot and action writer. I was skimming and glued to the screen during Danny's fight with what I assume is Daniel's father's ghost. Very intriguing, I'm interested in seeing where this goes. Your Tucker and Sam are intensely in character; it's almost scarily good the way I can envision them saying your lines. :) Daniel's a little too moody for my liking, but he is my favorite SG character, so...it's nice to just see him there.

Well, like I said, awesome concept and brilliant start. I just suggest you reread your first chapter and edit it. But, this is, by no means, awful. I'm rather enjoying it and look forward to reading the next chapter. :)

--DPSG1

Oh. So Danny DID die. Anubis just needed his help...hm. I think that after this is over, when Danny's time really DOES come, he'll just cross over with no fuss. There's no way he wants to go through having his soul ripped again.

Well, maybe it wasn't the most exciting chapter but at least things are on. And you come back! That's wonderfull! :D
I'm worry, what would Anubis do after Danny help him? I think I didn't understand very good this part. Wouldt take his powers or would take his life?
Very touching about his family.
Submit soon, please. Take care you, ok?
Bye!!

Beautiful chapter! I love the way you write. ^^ i cant wait for the next chapter. *hugs*

Wasn't exciting? Hello! HE WOKE UP! (jumps up and down) And it was really cool! I liked how Anubis just looked at him and said, "wake up" when Danny asked what he had to do! SO COL!

I'm liking where this is going, but Daniel is not be smart! ALWAYS listen to the warning in the back of your head! Tis there for a reason! (nods) Lol, I think Sam's reaction was very accurate!

So...how do I get this plushie? O.O ^_~
-Dizgirl

Yay! Danny isn't dead! -dances around the room chanting aforementioned statement- :D This was an awesome chapter, as well as an awesome story! Can't wait to read more!

Thanks for updating. You really did leave us hanging. So, I'm slightly confused about why exactly Danny couldn't keep living as he always has and why Anubis has to take his powers away. I get that it has to do with balance, but could you explain more? I just didn't quite understand it all, especially since everything was fine with Danny before his "chat" with Anubis.

Well, the chapter was hardly boring by any means. I will be intereted in reading the next one and seeing how you bring it all together as well as what happens to Danny.

Update soon :)

Well it's good writing, but not good for Danny! T.T He can't die! He's not allowed! (stamps foot) But I shall of course continue to read this and see if what has happened is permanent or not.

Would Vladenstein be so willing to change who is his son? Yeah, I can see that. He just wants something else to control. (shakes head) Plus, Daniel is a great resource (how wrong that sounds!)

Till the next!
-Dizgirl