That was very good. Hint: you might want to proofread a time or two before posting. If you write the story in Word, it has grammar/spell check built in. The consider errors when deciding the winners.

All in all, that was well written, especially taking into consideration that it was your first. Good luck with the challenge.

Thank you for submitting a story for the chappenge this month. Good luck and I'll see you at the finish line.

Goldpiece

Great Story! Loved it alot:-D