 GodOfFlame101 2008-02-21 . chapter 7So now the claw is on Zoidberg's hand is it? And I can yell at you for updating hahha! Anyway, since I don't think I've ever reviewed one of your stories (not sure why...), I had to develop a system for my long and rambling reviews called: Kudos and Comments!
Kudos to you "Hinata" for taking the initiative to write a fluffy story with the age-old performance setting. Honestly, is there anything more romantic than two performers whose love blossoms beyond the stage...Yes, That statement is my own. Buckets of kudos on the fluffytastic fluffness that is this fluffy story. Drama, suspense, love and longing; what more could romance lovers want!? Kudos to you for making the story shine with your own heart and brilliance; I hate it when I read and it seems like the words have just been glued to the page. You have taken the story and breathed your own life and being into it and for that, I congragulate you! A final kudo to you for your sparring cliff hangers. Too many people put cliffhangers in all of the time, as if it were a joke. Thank you for using them sparingly and in modest amount!
With that said, let's move to comments. First of all, Sakura? I could be wrong but I do sense a little bit of self involvment on the part of the writer. Honestly, who would do something like that; involve a portion of their being into the story (coughcough little voice in my head is reminding me of Kuzuki is Scandalous Investigations AND Purest Darkness which is in development)? Oh, all right! These characters are nessecary to propel the story. Who the hell else is going to do it? Damn sure won't be the main characters, always tip-toeing around the issues and it sure as HELL won't be the dead broad! So Go Sakura! Take it to crib! Anyway, a couple things you should look for, mainly spelling mistakes (not that I'm one to criticise [The Nek-Niche? I could kill myself...]), I'd be happy to edit your stories for you and yes, I do better job editing others than my own (I mainly skim through my own, too lazy to edit cough). "Aimoan"? That's the name? A bit perverted don't you think? It's either pronounced to the common American as "I moan" or "A moan" so...Finally, you will damn well update or I WILL hunt you down Hinata.
It's a great story and I'm excited for the conclusion. Though I must say, the romance has me by the heart strings. So don't end it too soon kay? Anyway, I'll think of some ideas and send them to you in a few days. I really like the story Hinata so tell me when it's almost finished so I can add it to my favorites (I normally only add completed stories to the list, thats just how I am)!
~"Damien" |
 AnimeKG 2007-12-31 . chapter 6LOVED IT! Wasn't Miroku with Inuyasha, and next you should have them actually do the whole play. Like have a dance and a football game, the dress rehearsal, and the final chapter as the play itself. |