Well written and VERY entertaining... XD Lyn is such a blockhead when it comes to etiquette though.

I only have one point of criticism: Florina's pegasus is called Huey (spelling?). Not Makar, though that name is good too. XD

Aw... They should totally be together in secret... hahaha! Wouldn't that confuse the people in the high ranks. Nice job though I wish they could be together. :)

cute. i liked it. i could completely imagine Florina and Lyndis interacting like that.

Heh, everything's not always a happy ending, i won't blame you...
This is nicely written,a nd delicate, and it does escape most of the clichés, so go you^^