Well done.

This is a great should make a sequle of this because I have a feeling that this could turn up to be a great please I would like for this story to continue on.

love it

Excellent story! Don't change a thing.

wow that was so intense!excellent writing the descriptions were so clear. i definately would have wanted to read more of this. maybe a sequel? oh and i guess i would have killed off the general.

I love it! I hope you do a sequel or continue from this.