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| Avatar CAN 2007-07-23 ch 1, | abuseI loved it. It's not the rubbish I write (take a look at my hp stories! REVIEW!) Tonks shoulda said, "Wotcher, Harry." I have no idea what that means. BYE! |
| Cuban Sombrero Gal 2007-07-22 ch 1, | abuseAww ... thanks for the cookies! This is great, all the dead *sobs* people are totally in character. Brilliant! Cuba |
| Secca Irises 2007-07-22 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful. Man, I was sobbing at that part of the story... Especially when Sirius spoke... The first person view was a tad bit annoying, but good none-the-less. |
| Olivia 2007-07-22 ch 1, anon. | abuseman that was beautiful...made me cry again after reading the book hahaha |
| whimsy007 2007-07-22 ch 1, | abuseI thought you did a pretty good job of keeping the feel of that chapter while expanding the group, but two things threw me off while reading this. One was a minor mistake in voice. Dobby didn't sound right. In the books I don't think he ever addressed Harry as "Mr. Potter", but always as "Harry Potter". A more overt mistake was with Tonks. Harry already knew she was dead. He saw her and Remus lying together next to Fred in the Great Hall. |