i love it continue soon!

omfg u have to continue before i start streaming curse words! this is fantastic!!

OMG! WHAT HAPPENED?
Did Edward come back?

A! I need answers! UPDATE! PLZ!

Wow!

I really hope inspirations strikes you with the second chapter soon!

Can not wait to see what happens...this si going on my favourites for certain = )

You have a beautiful elegance to your writing, brava!

omg this is good!
keep writing!

more more!! .. like it alot..more pleaase!

love it!

Not bad, not bad, I like it! :)

And, I think it's Edward. ;) Because you said:

'that Edward was gone is ignored.' So he's gotta come back sometime, eh?

I see nothing to critique, just that I think, in the part of the story when we are, she already had a relationship with Jakob that was closer than the one you mentioned.

very nice...but vampires in Twilight haven´t got fangs..they have almost the same teeth like humans only sharper...no longer...it´s on Lexicon...