It was okay... I know you could do better... Keep on writing!

lol

funny way to serve a lemon

cut in half andd you keep the other half, taunting us with its, um sourness?
Bitterness?

what are lemons taste

anyway
funny

Jaron out

Nice, very nice. I have a hard time with lemons to, you did a lot better then I could ever do =P

you should really write a 3rd chapter ^^ It's really good

I like it. Its not quiet lemon but its really cute!^^ A lemon is way more grafic than this...great story though!

Do not fear the **! -ninja- I totally did not just say that... I hope I'm allowed to say that. -gulp-

Uhm... anyway! Your doing fine! Just do it!

i love it. :D there definatly better be a next chapter.

Aww, I'm so proud of you, Yuki- you finally faced your fears! *Pats* I haven't yet, but someday I will! (Lol ^^) Great chapter- update soon!

Rissy

It's alright for your first lemon.

It went a little quickly and probably could have been extended a little. I also doubt that Riza would let Roy into her bedroom on their first date- especially one that hadn't been planned in the first place. But still, it was a very cute idea and well written. My only really qualm is that it could have been longer, but other than that, it was great ^^

And don't worry about not writing lemons. You're not a coward. I know I've /thought/ about trying to write one, but I usually end up just implying it. I know a bunch of my friends would read it, and some would be excited, and some would never look at me the same way again, lol ^^

Anyways- Good job!
-Rissy

really good job!! =D

This was sweet. Good job!

it was good...but promise me a lemon as the next chap...pls...

hmm..it was great and neatly done, especially the choice of words. ^^

LIME! LIME! Gagawa rin ako ng lime! XD

Nice one-shot. Good luck sa susunod na project! XD