Congradualations! Your writing is a terrible mess. Even the a professional team of editors who earned at Harvard cannot clean it properly.

The English has improved somewhat, though there are still issues, particularly names. There is a plot, which has now been tied up. The characters now seem a bit more like what they should be.

Well, it's an improvement, at least.

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Great job! xD