This is an interesting twist on this particular section of AJBAC. I'm not sure what I thought Zack was thinking of while these events were occurring; I was too wrapped into the rapidly moving episode to ponder Zack's tortured soul. I think you did a good job dealing with Zack's Max issues in this one, I can see the beginnings of how this might lead to Zack's demise at the end. Zack doesn't know what he'll do with himself when it's all over- if he kills himself nobly, he won't have to think about it anymore. Clever. I find it very interesting that you have Zack talking about Syl's lack of personality when you have clearly given a lot of attention to her personality in this fic. Syl has much more personality in this fic than she did in the show, and you've given her significantly more personality than you've given to Krit, as he still seems pretty flat. In sum, good job.

Nice! You did echo the earlier thought of Zack refusing to let Max die. throughout this fic, you've developed Zack's character so well. It hass been a real pleasure to read.

Great job with Zack! You SO cannot leave this here, you have to continue!

Wow. Zack's filler thoughts really flesh out the season finale. I think you've written him well. He would definitely fight to the end to suppress his emotions. I can't wait to see how you write the thought she has during the final moments. Look forward to reading them.

Another excellent chapter. I know I've said this before, I really like how you're doing Zack's thoughts through the entire episode. You show a really good insight to his character. I also thought the little bit you did on the death of the X5 was good. "That was the first and only time that I lost anyone. I swore that day that I would never experience that kind of failure again." I also thought that this nicely sets up for the fact that Max dies and then Zack kills himself for her. You have done well at developing the plot, it'll be interesting to see what you do with the rest.

So far this is fantastic, I'm really enjoying this fic. I've read a lot of AJBAC fics lately (it seems almost everyone has written them). What i like about this one is it is running through the entire ep, instead of just the final scene. I think this gives it a really interesting and different perpective. looking out for more.

You continue to do a fab job with Zack. I particularly liked Zack's running commentary on his health and his sibs. I also liked when he noted it would be a bad time to mention that if Max had timed things differently, she might have run them all over. Through Zack, you're giving some much needed character development to Syl and Krit, and that's a refreshing change from the constant focus of most fic on Max and Logan. My only complaint is that while Zack is entertaining, I don't know that he is quite entertaining enough for me to completely relive the season finale. For the fourth or fifth time. You're a great writer. You're successfully putting a new spin on events, but I find myself wishing you would write about *different* events than those whose sequence and dialogue I have already committed to memory.

Since the end of season 1, I've been assiduously avoiding all AJBAC fics. As an episode, AJBAC was heavy on, well, everything. I was also in a stage in which I was refusing to admit Zack was dead. Enough time has passed now that I could thoroughly enjoy this chapter. Zack is my favorite character, above Max, and certainly above Logan (Logan sets my teeth on edge, you know). I think you did a fabulous job with the first person POV thing, as well as with Zack in general. I didn't find him flat or difficult to understand-I thought there were traces of a dry wit that made me smile, like when he was thinking about breaking Logan's legs and then thought "work first, play later." I liked that you portrayed Zack as thinking that only the X-5s were worthy of his time; that has been my perception of him as well. On an unrelated note, it was cute how you had Zack telling himself to get his head in the game. He's told Max that before, and I was cringing a bit at the triteness of it until you had Zack say it seemed like he'd been saying that too often lately; I liked that. It will be interesting to see how you handle the AJBAC story. I find it unnerving when the main character of a first-person POV story is killed at the end, even if the story is being told in the present. Of course, that may just be me hoping you come up with a way in which Zack does not keel over dead in this story. The only thing that struck me as out of place at all was Zack calling Logan Mr. Cale-he doesn't need to suck up to Logan, and it doesn't seem in Zack's character to give that sort of respect, even in a sarcastic frame of reference. In sum, this was a most enjoyable read, as most of your stories are.

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Well, like I've said before, you have a good head for the military stuff-Zack's grocery list is particularly interesting. I like the fact that you really think about the science behind this stuff-much more than the writers on the show usually do. :) And I love how even when he's wounded Zack has to look at it in terms of what percentage mobility he has. You do a great job in many ways with these little details that make Zack different than normal humans. My one criticism-and I'm not sure it even counts as criticism because it does seem to fit the character-is that this Zack is awfully one-sided, and as a result, it's difficult to like him, or even really understand him. I had the same problem with him on the show-he's so *predictable*. I know this is just the beginning, so you're probably planning on fleshing it out more, and you're limited somewhat by the first-person POV (as Zack is obviously not the most self-aware guy in the world), but I just thought I'd share my reaction anyway. For what it's worth. And now we have *two* works-in-progress dragging us along... Sigh. We're not getting any younger here, Nevermore. :) As always, looking forward to the next...

Looking good so far! . . . finish it up soon and please, please, make it a Max/Zack! :)

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I'm finding this very interesting. You certainly have a "tough as nails" approach to every thing you write. I'm curious to know if this will be AU or if you'll be following the events of the series. I'd like to know more of Zack's plans for Logan, even though I am ML all the way. I really like your forth-right style. It's interesting hearing Zacks pov. Your characterization is right on. (This could have fun AU potential). I'm looking forward to more from you.

Amazing beginning...please continue with you plot line, it's really well written and gripping. Keep it up. Good luck!

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