u need to make them longer then that. it was getting good.

Great Job! QUICKLY UPDATE!

I love Im Sorry story!
Please update soon!
Ja'ne!

It's a good idea, it just has way to many grammar erorrs for me to even understand some of it. You need to get someone to beta these before posting.

Awsome Please update soon!

uk so please write another chapter soon please
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Hi~!!

This is a g8 fic.
And it IS small indeed -.-'
And i don't think 6 months is soon...
But i still like this fic ~!!
Hope u'll update soon~!!

i like it. it seems to me this is the type of story where Ash is gonna have to have a talk with Jimmy to set him straight.

Good Story please right more of this story.

Nice story i like this story and i hope you update soon

There is an improvement in grammar, but you can stll improve. Like, when a character asks a question, don't use a period, use a question mark.
For example: "What?" she said, not looking at him.

Other than that, this is a nice story. Look forward for more from this.

hey this story's really good :3 can't wait for the next chapter

wELL. IT IS PRETTY GOOD START.
nICE JOB.

it was very good especially the whole ash vs. jimmy XD