This is really interesting. I love the young characters portreyed. :)

nice

you do know ariana has blond hair and blue eyes, right?

I waited to review until I had read the complete fic. I really enjoyed it and loved the ending... you made some wonderful characters!

this is really great so far!! really original. can't wait to read the rest

I don't normally read many stories of this type. I mean that both in reference to the romance genre, and to completed stories in general :) This has been a truly stupendous read and everything I expected and more.

I look forward to more amazing works from you.

I think I said this in my first feview, not sure, but I'll say it again. That was easily the best Ariana fic I've read on here.

That was a wonderful story, absolutely wonderful

As much as I wanted to see her live a nice long life I think I have to agree with you!

I honestly don't know why this hasn't been more reviewed, but this is a great story and is going into my favs. I absolutely loved the way you ended it and I can't wait to see what you come up with next.

~ErikArden

awesome ending, this story just took the number one spot in my favorites. i hope Alice gets her own story ...wink wink with a ending like that come on...Teddy, Victoria, Alice, Rose are good characters for the new Marauders...

What a brilliant story!

While I've had a few negative things to say so far, I must say at the end you did well. You have real story-telling skills that you should nuture. The plot idea was unique and you carried it off.
On the negative side, you need a great beta to help you with the areas of writing that are weak. Your grammar skills need a lot of work. One area that you could improve is use of pronouns. "Her" is never the subject of a sentence. The correct pronoun for a subject is "she." For example, in the sentence "Her and I went to the store" the subject is "her and I." You wouldn't say, "Her went to the store" would you? No, you would say "She went to the store." So, the correct way to write the sentence is "She and I went to the store. It's the same for he and him.
Good luchk with your writing.

What a nice and bitter-sweet ending.
You should be really happy with yourself. Writing pairing stories for characters not well-known in cannon are often lacking in quality and realism. Ariana is perhaps the best example of this (seeing as she belonged to a different timeline). But despite this, you managed to write an excellent story
In the end it was two years well spent. Well, to be fair within those two years, you could have discovered the cure for cancer or something, but its still a grat story!

Keep up the good work
~Tom

good story. i felt that the epilogue was the best chapter of the whole story...even though i didnt like harry ending up with ginny...

anyway, good work. :-)