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YoungSasuke 2008-03-11 ch 6,	abuseVividly written. It definitely affects the reader, and really draws them in. Very good job on this.
shikuki 2008-01-03 ch 6, anon.	abuseI hope you update soon! ^_^
Majestically Mystical 2007-11-21 ch 6,	abuseGod, I loved this AU fic. Especially Orochimaru's char. I like this Oro better than all those evil!Oro's. :] Though I have to admit, I was suspicious the whole fic through... XD And God, Itachi's suicide really shocked me. I was like "Wait, what? Itachi DIED?! But where's that final Itachi Sasuke confrontation I wanted to read! ;o;" Lovely bittersweet ending.
ritachi 2007-09-15 ch 6,	abuseFor some reason, I don't quite like the ending that much. I mean, sure, it fits the story, but it doesn't feel all that concluding to me, especially with Orochimaru smirking in the end. When he smirks, I think of something evil. But yeah, it is definitely plausible. All these events flow into a piece of writing that can never be sustained for long by other writers, but you pulled it off. There was no great resolve, but there was a resolve in the end, and we'll never know if Sasuke will be able to pull it together- "to live in the present." However, in another perspective, one can think that everything has been resolved. Although Itachi and Sasuke weren't able to patch all of their differences and live together, Itachi's death was enough to piece Sasuke's former self back together. Itachi's death was the rebirth of Sasuke (possibly an allusion to the actual Naruto storyline?). Sadly though, I was expecting Sasuke to stumble upon Itachi's journal and read the things Itachi left behind in the process. But I guess that's too much of a cliché, so I'll just leave it to you. Overall, it was a nicely written story. There was no great ray of light, but there was enough of a one to give this story a proper ending. I'm a bit saddened by the turn of events, but like life, we can't help it. All we can do is just move on, and you portrayed that brilliantly. Good work at completing this lushly angst-ful story. P.S. Why is the chapter named both "Diamond" and "Come Kindly"?
LutraShinobi 2007-09-14 ch 6,	abuseSo the story's complete, is it? Well, I must say I thought the ending was fitting, even if Itachi dying was a horrible twist. But the end has an optimistic note that speaks volumes to me, and to Sasuke. All I can say is, great story, great chapter. The writing is beautiful, weaving a web of emotions and troubles together like a very skilled spider, and I liked the concept. You're a great writer, and you deserve recognition for it. Wonderful job on a unique story with deep, striking themes.:)
gare de lyon 2007-09-13 ch 6,	abusethat was lovely and terribly sad but awesome too i liked the assonance somewhere, it was cool you rock
viciouscallisto 2007-09-13 ch 6, anon.	abusewow, i must say that this story has suprised me! i didn't expect itachi to kill himself and i really didn't expect orochimaru-sama to be so sincere. i'm sad that itachi and sasuke-kun weren't able to work out their problems with each other but i am glad that both had at least wanted to. i'm really glad that orochimaru-sama was a nice guy. if he turned out to be a sleeze, i would've just cried, poor sasuke-kun can only handle so much. i really enjoyed reading this fic. despite the angst, it ended with a sense of hope for sasuke-kun. good job with the fic!!
PopTartAddict 2007-09-09 ch 5,	abuseThere really isn't much to be said...sad. Very, very sad. Wonderful job.
Rinix14 2007-09-08 ch 5,	abuseSOBS NO YOU KILLED ITACHI calms down and lightly cries How could you well anyway it was goos is there going to be more?
LutraShinobi 2007-09-08 ch 5,	abuseNo! Anything but that! Not Itachi...:( This was so sad. Why couldn't they have just settled their differences? But Itachi didn't seem to be the suicidal type - this surprised me. I kinda knew what was coming when Kisame arrived, though. Well-written, emotions beautifully conveyed as always, but I can't say I liked the content too much. Anyway, the story doesn't seem to be over, so I'll be waiting to see where you'll choose to take this. Update soon!
gare de lyon 2007-09-07 ch 5,	abuseokay so when i first was reading this, i was all set to comment about pancakes and then itachi died... that was pretty intense brah, hugely powerful imagery also you have a pretty awesome gift writing wise
ritachi 2007-09-07 ch 5,	abuseI think if this story was read without knowing the characters through and through, I believe the readers would be telling Sasuke to go to Orochimaru for comfort and to get away from Itachi who seems to only hurt Sasuke more. Sadly though, we have gotten to know each of these characters for this is fanfiction. And because of this reason, the readers cry out to Sasuke to get away from Orochimaru and understand and try to fix the relationship he has for Itachi. Brothers should be together, as family. And that's why you will get many sad readers because of this chapter. I don't know if I'm one of them or not. I don't know anything anymore. All I know is that when I found out Itachi was dead, my heart stopped for a mere millisecond before my eyes continued to read on. Itachi's dead. A reader's dream or nightmare. And that's what you did. You made the reader decide if it could really be a dream or a nightmare. Instead of making it overly emotional or dramatic, you made it subtle, and like I said before in my other review, realistic. If I think about it in a different perspective without knowing the background personality of Orochimaru, I would say that what Orochimaru is doing for Sasuke is truly sweet and endearing. Kisame, although not the same fondness, there is very thin compassion escaping the older man. And the use of the swears is done very well. I can see your reasons for using it. Instead of being like the thousands or readers out here who use it whenever it's the smallest irritation or anger, you use it when it's necessary. I commend you on that. I would have to say the ending of the Orochimaru and Sasuke scene where Orochimaru is hugging Sasuke; and the Kisame and Sasuke washroom scene was definitely the most emotionally driven scenes in this chapter (but really, they were all emotionally driven). It felt, for a second, almost warm in this story that winter seems to last for all eternity. I wonder if that's what you're doing. I feel like Sasuke is seeing the light, like the light is coming forth from the cloudy skies above their heads. If that is intentional (and I mean really intentional; not subconscious intentional), then that deserves more clapping from me. However, I never would've said this, but this chapter had the least amount of angst throughout the entire story so far. But I guess when you're not holding in your emotions, bottling them up into a jar that is much too small to hold them, and you just let them out like Sasuke did in this chapter, the readers (well, mainly me) must feel like the burden is gone- a breath of fresh air, I suppose. It feels like the dark clouds surrounding this story has finally lightened. But that really isn't an appropriate thing to write, or even to utter. It's just...this story is quite simple. The plot's simple. The summary's simple. The writing is mainly simple (there are a very intricate complexities here and there). However, all these simple things that you've squished together is anything but simple. It's complex. It weaves. It flows. It comes together and gives a reader entertainment yet a perspective. It doesn't make them think, sadly (unless you count me), but it gives them more than that. It takes the word "Angst" and pushes it past the border of blood, violence, gore, rape, tears, heartbreak, death, etc. And without resorting to anything like that (the drugs and alcohol is negligible in my book), you've made a tale that is so vivid and cruel that we just can't help but want to shield our eyes from the glare of the snow of the brothers' tale- so soft and white that it entices us, but so vulnerable and fragile that it breaks so easily; the cold that makes us hate it, but the inescapable beauty that wants us to embrace it. This story is like that. It's snow. It's winter. It's life. Great chapter, but not the best out of the rest. This story is now on uneven ground where the readers don't have a clue of what you're planning to do. Keep it up and keep yourself relaxed and healthy (don't get depressed from writing it as much as you depress the readers, you hear?). P.S. Sorry for the extremely scattered review. Even I don't have an idea of what I'm writing or even thinking at this point (I wonder if it's comprehensible). Too much grief I suppose...
Sky Falls 2007-09-07 ch 5,	abuseWow...Itachi's gone? I don't think I can grasp that. sniff You did this amazingly well, it was heartwrenching, realistic, and just so many things that I don't know how to describe. I'm really curious about where this is going, there's a bunch of possibilities but you probably already have an idea. Incredible job, -Sky
Rinix14 2007-09-04 ch 4,	abuseMore please this is too goods ;)
ritachi 2007-09-02 ch 4,	abuseThis story is just so heartwrenching. It reminds me of the manga "Life", but unlike "Life", this story's angst is written very subtly that it's just so relatable and painful. It's not so dramatic or soap-opera-ish that it turns off certain readers. It's just realistic and so painful to read. The amount of angst in this story will turn away readers, but those who continue to read such an angst-filled story, I'm sure they will be rewarded. This story makes me feel so powerless. All I want is for Sasuke and Itachi's happiness, but with each page, I feel like it's getting more hopeless. And that hopeless feeling is just so hard to write, but you've nailed it down amazingly. I just hope that the characters will get an ending that is suitable for each of them. When I read how Sasuke lashes out against Itachi who is sort of trying to reach out to him, I feel like I want to cry. The ending of this chapter hurt so much because I've been in such a relatable feeling where you feel like you've done everything you can possibly do, but nothing's going the way you want. It's like you just want to go back to the past where everything was so much easier and happier. I don't know what else to say. The writing is supreme. It's very well done without being too descriptive or too light. Your style is very good too. Overall, it's a story that everyone deserves to read, but if some people turn away because of the angst, then it's fine because this just portrays an ugly world where we wish to run away from forever and ever. But those who can stand there and look at that ugliness, they'll be rewarded with a happy ending (or so I hope for the brothers). (Don't get me wrong that this story is ugly. It isn't! ^^") Amazing work.

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