I would suggest adding the part where he over hears Kel talking about the Chamber talking to her. In the books it implies that he hears.

NO! you ended it!! I want to know what happens when Kel goes to Steadfast at the end of lady knight. KEEP GOING. YOUR GOOD DON'T STOP!

good job! It was well done!

wow! pretty good for a thirteen year old! i always love doms POV on different parts of the book, and i found it interesting that kel and his relationship had started BEFORE they came back. verry good, and i will have a look at some of your other fics. :)

Aw, this was really sweet, you wrote it well!
I liked the bit about Dom comforting Kel during her nightmare at Giantkiller.