Hey, great idea, and I like how you've been working with this - I look forward to getting through the next chapters.

I finally got to read this. I liked this story a lot, too bad it was just one case (and like Peacewish said, on the short side!).

I had to use a lot of concentration while reading this, though, since first person POV makes me prone to stop reading half-ways or miss a line or two while reading (dunno why). In a few words, it bores me. So, the fact that the story was going pretty fast actually made me focus a lot, and not miss a bit. XD

All the little jokes were my favorite, and of course, Tomoyo's relationship with Touya. Nakuru was fun, and I actually laughed out loud at the description of that woman inside the club. Long waist white hair? Haha! And to top it off, the 'stranger' salute, just like Nakuru :3

Gangsta!Eriol makes me think that he would be a great friend with Artemis Fowl. Maybe one day I'll write about how those two scam the magical community with wit and charms. For the moment, though, they'll stay as neighbors.

The only thing that I will critic, if anything, would be that sometimes the background was too much detailed on his apartment. Perhaps there was some sort of simile in there that I missed, or a purpose for detailing it so much.

...and sugar?? Never would have thought of that!

Aw, over so quick. It was depressing, of course, because Sakura's in a coma and there doesn't seem to be much of a relationship going on between her and Li (or perhaps there was once a little something, given the antagonism between our two boys?), but the ride was wild and fun. Touya is, of course, unbearably sexy and anything featuring him in such a studly role is going to be good. You're almost as good a fangirl as a real girl.

Well, okay, I had to come hunting for it, but I did finally track it down. It looks you updated this last fall after I'd dropped off the face of LJ to take care of personal issues. Very steamy, rich with the imagery of dim streetlights and trench coats. I'll finish it. But dearest God, scratch the orbs from the end of the second chapter.

Black Lagoon...is that a reference to the anime? I read about it.

...poor tomoyo...update soon!

Will Sakura and Eriol be mentioned? Are Touya and Tomoyo together?

Nice story and even nicer Syaoran :)