I liked it, good characters and characterization.
The first chapter threw me off with the whole I-live-him-oh-i-love-him-too thing, and then the beginning of 4 chapters that wuld make a very long story. I expected a faster turnout for the two, so try to spread the love-interest-stuff through the entire thing.

Also, edit a little for the basic mistakes, and weird senteces. Otherwise, party on.

Yes! Update!

The line about Zechs and Heero is my favorite line of the chapter.
I hope you will continue to update and not abandon this. I love stories about Duo's street life and Wufei-Duo stories, so this one is, like, Godiva to a chocoholic.

(And Xenosaga? Way to go! I'm more than mildly obsessed with that trilogy. I even have the Japanese-only DS version...and I don't speak much Japanese. Spread the Xenolove!)

OMGOMGASFLJKLD;LKSPAZCRY.

And that only expresses a small portion of my deep sorrow, shame and regret. I know I was meant to beta this story, but my computer has had shed loads of problems over these last months, and even now I still can't access my email. So I don't get to beta your lovely fic. D;

Seriously, I'm sorry for any trouble I might have caused because of this. But it doesn't seem like you need me anyway since this new chapter is great! C:

Update soon!

Someone listens to me! And I am grateful, and have gone to my happy place.

I've started work on that icon, I've got the first version done (I always make a few, until I'm finally happy! Probably why I never get anything else done, come to think of it...) and I'll email it to you if you like.

I like this chapter, it's definately getting grittier. I'm glad the plot actually has some substance, all too often the plot is simply a vehicle for the characters to hook up, rather than being the basis of the story.

I totally agree with the Zechs and Heero comment. Five kids against a supermassive organisation? take every chance you get, goddamnit!

One thing - it's Zechs Merquise, not Marquise.

ps - I too have 'What's up, people' in my head. I downloaded it after you introduced me!

A update! And what a nice one it was. (warning no spell check)

I loved the-He’d never said that he fought fair. He wasn’t Zechs Marquise. He didn’t give his enemy any help. He had decided long ago that Zechs, like Heero, had no sense of self-preservation whatsoever.- Yes! They are in a WAR! They kill people for a living. Thank you for not turning this in to sugery-cute-fake story.

It was a while ago since I read this story so I re-read it and I have to say that I like it even more now :)

I love how different "all's fair" are from "Teenage terrorist." Not just the plot but the tempo, the characters and the language. Very well done. I'm looking forward to reading more of both of them :)

ps- I still have "What's up People" playing in my head

Dude! Update!

I've got at least 3 of your stories on Story Alert, but I like this one muchly.

I love ""Five of the voices say ‘yes’, three say ‘no.’ But those are the three we’re killing tonight."" It may be one of the best lines ever.

May I make it into an Icon/Avatar? If I get round to it, of course. ;p

Anyroad, I love your writing, your Duo is pretty much perfect!

Update, make me happy. I already have a wonderful image of Duo and Heero 'alligator wrasslin',' which always makes me grin.

Ah! This is great! I have no words. I really, really, really want to find out what's going to happen. I love your Wufei. He feels so real some how. A bit stiff on the surface but all sweet and wonderful on the inside. And to put the story on L2... *bowing at your feet* Brilliant! The anticipation for more is undeliverable.

very good and poor Wuf wuf...

Wufei: SHUT THE ** HELL UP!!

Wow..Don't need to curse...please update soon

Please write more! I love it. I laughed at the alligator wrestling part and the part about recipes for rats. Write more soon? Pwease?

I love the quote about the voices.

Yeah...^^ Poor Wufei...^^ Lucky Duo...Insane...Real good chapter!^^ Update soon!

Yay, an update!

It's ok that the chapter is short, at least it's there... Can't wait for the next one!

Okay...you got me with the "five of the voices say 'yes,' three say 'no'" line. Hysterical! So I just had to comment. That and the bit about having the BEST recipes for rat was just too funny. So now I guess I just have to keep reading and see if the remainder of the story keeps up the excellent humor. So, update soon?

"game of pinball he had installed on Deathscythe’s computer" holy crap i love this part. you have brighyned my day, love.
the story is going excelent.
hey is wuffers going to wear "street rat"´s clothing?
hope you discribe that moment.
and is duo meeting some "old friend" in L2? because you mention that they were going to need a crew.
hope you update soon
ja ne

Sweet! They're goin' to L2! I love when they do that. And I can't wait to see Wuffers try to be a street rat. "Injustice!" Ah, yes, I can picture it now. He'll be so full of righteous indignation! And I love the line about the voices. So Duo, and so very humorous. I want to say that in real life now. All the time.
-J.D.