I liked the emotion you put here, Ino and Shikamaru are still pretty raw even after the three years of Asuma's death. Their tears and their voices really show the damage they carry inside of them and you did a good job with that.

The bitterness in Shikamaru's voice with reminding Ino that she didn't want to be in the same team as him really show has both of them have unintentionally hurt each other. you did a good job taking things from the past and bringing it in.

The last line is perfect. To have Ino realize what has been under her nose all along and start persuing that.

WRITE MORE FLUFF. Seriously, you have the potential to make some good romantic fics. It's nice to see a male writer enter this arena. I hope to see more from you.

Good Luck and Happy Writing
-K.M.

aw
so cute
Kawaii
:D
you did a good job


sincerely
Flaming beauty Ino

Good job! I really think it's a nice touch how you differentiate between Shikamaru being an academic genius and a people genius. Because we all know boys have some issues there. This was a really nice fic, I especially enjoyed the ending line.