I hate Kate.

Honest to god I do.

But I love your writing.

But I hate Kate. It must be said.

You can probably attribute my hatred to the fact that I'm a diehard Maya/Will shipper, but regardless, you're an amazing writer... I just found it really incredibly depressing that Will and Kate did end up getting together.

But like I said before, you've got a lot of talent, and it was really great reading your stories! Especially Storybook, which was geared perfectly to my tastes (Despite the fact that I know Maya will die within moments after you've scripted the last chapter), so I have to say, I totally admire your writing talents!






but seriously. kate sucks. ;)

Whew. Well, this was quite a ride. I was on pins and needles for the last bit of the story because I was completely unable to predict which path you would ultimately take - Will alive, or Will dead? The ending was fitting, though slightly bittersweet.

I will admit to having reservations about Kate throughout the story (mostly because of the "hopelessly-in-love" angle) but for the most part you managed to pull it off, which was impressive. It must have been quite the balancing act.

Anyway, this was well-written, well-characterized and well-plotted, with plenty of twists and turns along the way - I was genuinely shocked when Marlowe was killed. Finally, the section with Will standing on the bridge, getting ready to walk away from it all, will stick with me for quite a while. Well done, and thanks for sharing.

This chapter gets nothing but love from me, honestly. You do quite a bit of foreshadowing here, between Will's determination to eventually leave to Kate's assurance to herself that she could never kill Will.

Oh, and another thing. I noticed how Kate thinks of Will, and I find it amazing that she is so absolutely besotted with him - it's almost comical at first, until one realises that she has practically lived a life with him at the center for years... Film, audio and psych-profiles. It's really just great characterisation again, isn't it? *sigh* I wish I could write like you...

Yeah, so I'm re-reading this piece of awesome fiction and this time I'm taking a little more time to comment on things (the first read through had me 'turning pages' in a near-frenzy.)

I'd like to say how utterly amazing it is that you work in a little emotional attachment between Kim and Will. It is something one doesn't see often in fics with pairings, and it makes the real love between her and Jay so much more real and helps lend an absolute credibility to your characters (and yes, they are yours; you make them so!)

I've commented on your characterisation before, and this, I think is a very big reason for the quality of your work: you make them PEOPLE, not just one-dimensional figures... I am so in love with your work, and really saddened to see that you haven't written anything else for ths fandom since last I looked (and I look a lot). I hope you'll consider doing another piece, because... well just because. You're one (if not THE) best writer on in my opinion!

Ebon Hush

oh.my.god...

This story... wow. This amazing piece of fiction had me cursing, smiling and crying in turns. Actually crying! (I bet you can imagine at which parts...)

I've never read anything like that before, really. At first I couldn't stand the idea of you bringing back Kate (thought she'd be a Mary Sue-ish deal), I really came to sympathize both with her, Liz and Nell. Good idea to only really use featured female characters.

The plot of this story was amazing: rich, complex and well thought out. I admire that. Your characterization is utterly believable and almost touchable.

The entire thing has been a huge inspiration to me, and I now have a very good idea of how to portray one of Aaron's other roles: Pyro from the X-Men movies as my fic goes into the terrorsim/counter terrorism spin I had planned. I'll be sure to credit you as my unwary muse.

Thank you for this. You're an exceptional writer.

Peace Out

Ebon Hush

This is absolutely amazing.

You are my queen (queen? king? mythical tyrant?) and I want you to know you've inspired me more than I've been inspired in a long, long time.

I can't quite say anything else, because you say it all in your story.

Everything's where it's supposed to be, and that's beautiful.

Alex.

Oh my goodness. What a way to end this extremely good narrative –it definitely relieved the “Traveler” withdrawal I felt after its cancellation, and gave me closure about the series. I almost felt strung along with all the constant not-deaths, but strangely enough, my feelings about your ending was kind of like how I’d felt about the last Harry Potter. Will dying felt like the right option, but I still felt incredibly happy that he lived at the end, though with the possibility of never seeing his friends again. The recording at his gravestone was a nice touch, too, very sweet. I thought it was interesting that Kim didn’t want to know, that both her and Jay are hiding something from each other, something related to Will…and I liked Liz’s reappearance at the end, the gathering of all the people who knew him at his “funeral.” And Jay and Tyler’s musings at the gravestone were so incredibly sad –they won’t forget him. Anyway, GREAT job with this story (I’m still amazed at its length) and the wonderful character and plot work here. I really enjoyed it.

aw that was so so good, it was beautifully written sad and happy at the same time. What a beautiful journey you created and I can only wish they continue the series just like this-- tho they probably wont- thank you for this amazing story.
~Rotem

ahh oh no dead? really like really really dead? are you sure? lol guess I'll have to wait and see update soon

You are evil.

For Criminey's sake, did you think I didn't cry enough in the last chapter? No, you had to add the absolutely beautiful goodbyes of each character to force me to break out the tissue box again!

I was so relieved Kim was alive, but that relief pretty much blew over once Kate learned Will jumped off the bridge. I was expecting mourning, but do you end there? No- instead you bring him back!

You better have a hell of a good reason for bringing him back. I thought the way he died before was beautiful. This made me uncomfortable... Will didn't want to come back, nor would it be good if he had. He didn't want to be stuck in the CIA. After re-reading the last chapter, I had decided I very much liked how you ended it; it made sense. But then to contradict yourself- for what purpose?

Will's Heaven seems like a beautiful place; I love the descriptions. Part of my want for Will to remain there is because it seems like a place he could truly be happy. And I love Will Traveler; he's lived a crummy life, and I think Heaven is his happy ending. (Especially because Maya is there.)

Thank you for Jay's scene. He never had the back-bone to kill anyone before, but if there was anyone that would change that, it was Maxwell Abrams. (Although, neither Marlow or Kim killed Chambers; that was a bummer.) It was a very well thought out scene, although I doubt Kim will never find out. She's always been able to read Jay.

The only thing I can guess as to bringing Will back was so his friends could say goodbye. And I suppose that wasn't a bad idea; especially for Kate. Saying goodbye to him, while he could still hear them, was a closure they needed. God bless Will Traveler, the best damn agent and friend who lived.

I think the saddest aspect of this chapter is the fact that there is only one more update remaining till it's finished. I have enjoyed this story so much, (what an obvious statement) and I sincerely hope you don't plan on permanently ending writing for Traveler. We don't receive nearly enough stories for the show, and especially few so well written.

-Sincerest, Song

...

This is the part where I try not to cry.

Will!

holy crap, I can't believe that just happened! Amazing chapter

Woah intense, That was very very good in fact this entire story is just amazing really. Every character is in character and although I had my doubts about including Kate but you really pulled it off. I like how well thought out and detailed this story is. I also love angst which ran rampant and I love putting my favourite characters through hell and break them a little as long as they get put back together somewhat at least. Although I really hope Will doesn't die :) tho torture is fine :b ok im done. Kepp up the amazing work, update soon
~Rotem

You jerk! What the hell do you do to me?

I'm bawling! It's absolutely embarrassing, but I can't stop crying. Who do you think you are, killing Will Traveler? And Marlow?! These are not your characters. You can't do whatever the hell you want with them! Not a dying finale; yeah right!

*Fifteen minutes later*

I'm sorry about that. Really. Okay, down to review.

So much for happy-hour. You had everything going so nicely in the last chapter, that naive me thought the worst would be if Will signed with the CIA. But no- the Fourth Branch members get blown up, and our characters get fired upon! With each turn, it seems like that smidgen of hope is taken away. Damn, these FB agents are good. You almost killed Thad; that would have been awful, especially as Tyler has already lost a family member. I still can't grasp why you killed Marlow. If anything, I thought it would be Stone to die.

(I realize I keep saying "you killed" although technically it was Fourth Branch. However, I'm holding you accountable anyway.)

Will had agreed to join the CIA. Selfless to the end, wasn't he? Though not perfect, Traveler has never cared for his own well-being, which is why the ending of this chapter (unfortunately) seems true-to-character. The battle-scene surprised me because of how easily Kate and Nell were willing to give up Traveler to protect Jay and Tyler. Sure, they are both good agents, but both have such a connection with Will... I can only imagine their reaction to his death.

And just to make sure, he is going to die, yes? I mean, if you are going to start the next chapter with "But after stepping off the ledge, the cool Potomac river had not swept Will away. Instead, a firm grasp on his shoulder left him dangling in mid-air." You're too good of an author to do that, but I hope I didn't go hysterical at a false-death.

If this were a normal story, I would say Kim was dead. But you have thrown so many twists around that for all I know, Max didn't kill her. Although, we both know he would have no reason to keep her alive, at least for Will's sake. Aw, I don't want to picture Jay when he finds out his wife and children were murdered!

The last chapter... I already gave snipets of my thoughts above, however I wanted to be sure to mention that I loved Maya being there with him. It was the way I always saw Will dying, with Maya at his side, and your descriptions made the scene so easy to picture (which made it all the more dramatic).

Probably my longest, and most-rambly, review for you, you have a completely helpless fanatic on your hands. Two more chapters... I look forward to Max being killed (and he better be, for your sake) and any other wonderful turns you have planned.

-Devoted, Song