Aw...I liked the overall idea: "Dog in shining armor." The poem was well done, too. Good job!

KIKYO'S NOT THAT BAD!

Sorry, I know I'm overreacting, but she isn't! You made her a monster...oh...wait. *reads author's note* Oh, okay then. I can forgive you. =) I still prefer the first two poems, but these last ones weren't bad, either.

You did get Kagome down. She'd do anything for him.

However...errors. The first line: Your the one I need.

You're the one I need.

Misreble.

Miserable.

But I THINK that was all...still, nice job...this one I liked better than the last, though I thought the first two were the best.

...Okay, I don't think that one was your best. Kikyo's not that evil. She's in pain. Cursed.

I think you're better at writing your other style, without trying to make it rhyme as well, but this still isn't bad...I just don't like how you attacked Kik...o0...

You capture Kikyo perfectly. She's in such agony, such pain - it's no wonder she can't let go. I hate it when people attack her.

Now, I did see one error: You put down 'bare' instead of 'bear.' In this case, the latter is correct.

Again, I enjoyed it very much! You are excellent at portraying emotions, so much so that I could almost feel her pain.

Hey! You reviewed some of my poetry a really long time ago, and now I've finally been able to get to you and review yours.

That was amazing and beautiful. I'm not very good at poetry, and this isn't my style, so it's even harder for me to judge, but I still think I can say you did amazingly well. I'm eager to read more.

Hm... not your best I would say, but it was still alright.
~Shippo

Wow this is my fave! I love it! So much dark love! Sweetness!

Yay more awesomeness!
~Shippo

So dark and sad. O I love it!
~Shippo

again wondering why nobody has reviewed these poems. I like these verses...
"Blood becomes my tears

Blood becomes my air

I cannot bare

You taunt and daunt my love

But now my voice, my face, they haunt

And now I lay here, battered and blood splattered."

that is so beautiful. I liked it so much that I started hearing Evanescence singing it in my head which means that aka... it sounds like a poem written during the bleeding of the heart and sorrows that tears can't erase, but keeps trying. I wish I could write just like you. I LOVE IT! Write more poems! I can't wait!

oh...my...gosh...! so beautifully written... I'm gonna read the next chapter...