Aww thats so sad! Poor baralai!
good story though!

Aww... I think you did well showing Baralai's conflicted feelings. Also, the moment where she withdraws her hand was very well-written.

Short and sweet. Nice.

This is absolutely beautiful, extremely well written, and just captures emotion perfectly.

Aww, I loved this. This story was so bittersweet. I feel bad for poor Baralai.

Great job on this. I really enjoyed it.

Sweet, sweet Yunalai lurve. *swoon*

Ohh, not many takes on that pairing. This was a good one. I liked how Baralai seemed to want to blame Shuyin for the feelings, but at the same time he knew they were his own. xD

Very good take on that scene. It was a very bittersweet moment. Baralai's awkwardness and Yuna's discomfort were strongly felt. I enjoyed every bit of it!