My god, mud fight? You gotta get writing and finish this! And could you put in some desriptive stuff? Just for me?

xxStellaxx

Hilarious! I love Alex/Lara fics. The script-style format is neat. Keep it up!

*throws slime at tompson*

Mmmm. Nice! But isn't Lara supposed to be a top Tomb Raider if there is such a thiNG? Surely they'd pay for rooms.

cool fic.

Ohhhhhhh...Please continue soon

hehehehehe! it's funny! and good! this is sorta a humor 2.

Sorry but things are just really weird

I'll try to be gentle about this. It's far too fast moving. Is it suppose to be script like? Then get trid of "The Narrator" and just put the actions in brackets or italics. I doubt Lara agreeing to a job *that* quickly, no questions asked. If it's going to be a dialouge centred, fic, then we need better dialouge. Damn, that didn't come off as gentle, did it? I tried. Sorry.

Cute story :) Continue

In the novelisation Lara threatened to walk around naked rather than wear a dress. Sack the narrator unless this is shaping for a comedy.

But this could rock

Has the makings of a good story. Enlarge on the plot. Ditch the narrator. Make Lara ...well, more like Lara. She's very uncharacteristic. A dress? Honestly, I think she'd rather go naked if there was nothing to wear!

Very out-of-character. And what's up with the Narrator thing? Don't get me wrong, I think the plot has potential but get it needs work. If you're interested, I'll beta-read for you.

It's obvious you put alot more effort into ths then the makers of the film did so I congratulate you. Ihope to see more from you.