hahaha very funny... loved it! bellatrix is my fave character... ;) good use of Celine Dion's song, the Power of Love, very clever the way you weaved it through the plot of the story, kinda like the story is based on the song a little bit... :P

Too many "No"s. Makes it way to exaggerated.

The concept was good, although not what I would normally would read. An interesting way to forefill Dumbledore's belief was that the power that Voldemort knows not was love. He knew it at the end and it killed him.

However in saying that it was badly executed. First of all the Killing Curse is an instant kill and thus Bellatrix could not talk after being hit. However that is forgivable and I didn't notice it until my second reading. Secondly your time line is all screwed up. Voldemort was at least twenty when Bellatrix went to school as he went to school with Lucus' Father. Dubledore went even earlier then that. Thus at the very best Dumbledore was 50 in Bellatrix's time most likely older as he is said to be 100 something in Harry's time. But that is forgivable as well.

The only thing in this story that really needs to be changed is the obsessive use of the "No!" First of all you used it to much that it appeared comical, and I had to check what genre your story actually was, something I rarely have to do. It is also better to write "NO!" as that is both scream-like with anguish and doesn't look over the top and silly.

Lastly the ghost talking like that in movies, no writer should write ghost talk like that as it looks once again silly. Instead, using bold or italic would have been far better.

However before you stop reading this I would once again say the concept was good. You execution needs work, as if it is hard to tell if this if serious or a crack fic something is wrong.

Well, that was slightly less painfull to read than having a root canal. Most of you're fact were horribly wrong. Dumbledore first of all is gay, and way older than either Bellatrix or Voldemort, and he was a Gryffindor, so he would have had access to the Slytherin dorm room. Bellatrix wouldn't call harry, harry she would call him by his sur name, potter. Avada kedavra kills instantly so Bellatrix can't talk after killing herself with it, it doesnt work that way. Harry porclaiming his love for everyone that was captured was a bit redundent. Why would Hermione faint at a slap on the face; cause i'm pretty sure she wouldn't. You can't take a person's magic away! All in all this story was pretty suckish, the idea was good, but the execusion left a lot to be desired.

Lol, brilliant!

"I LUB YOU BELLY"

Oh frig that was queer, I fell over laghing (i mean, BELLY? come on!) but felt nauseated at the same time. btw, the avada kedavra curse kills instantly, but u probably know that, so yeah.

that was the funniest thing I have ever read. now tell me, that 'romance/angst' classification is part of the joke, right? I'm sure you meant to list this under 'comedy.' I mean, you can't expect anyone to take this seriously.

Well, how, Erm...Interesting. . . .

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"Absolutely excellent! I loved how you used those beautiful lyrics to convey what mere prose could not. Please continue writing-this is definetly one of the most interesting and insightful fan fictions that I have ever read!"

Haha. I love sarcasm

this was really funny lmao.

Ermm... that was really awkward... Dumbledore is old enough to be Bellatrix's grandfather. and Lord Voldemort is old enough to be her father...

YOU'RE BRILLIANT. MARRY ME.

This was one of the saddest things I've ever read! If Voldemort actually did that to my friends, I think I'd want to k-i-l-l him too! Oh my gosh...that was totally shocking, dude, I swear! And yet...it rocked! It just sheds such light on the fact that...Harry can't hide forever. He won't always have his friends by his side... Beautiful, heartbreaking job. Keep up the good work!

Sincerely signed,

Shizuku Tsukishima749 :D ;D :) ;)

Absolutely excellent! I loved how you used those beautiful lyrics to convey what mere prose could not. Please continue writing-this is definetly one of the most interesting and insightful fan fictions that I have ever read!

i think i can sum my reaction up in 3 words... WHAT THE HELL?

I quite liked this, but I think the characters weren't acting quite as they should be, really. Also, you made quite a few grammar mistakes. I like the plot apart from the bit with Dumbledore, 'cos that would like NEVER happen. But it was funny!:) Plus, Avada Kedavra doesn't draw blood and it's effects are immediate.