 The Love Slug 2008-07-27 . chapter 1"Well, well b#&, you ain't as bad as I thought." He laughed and (then) turned to a dark corner of the bedroom, where a small table covered in candels stood.
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"Well, well b#&, you ain't as bad as I thought." He laughed, (then) turning to a dark corner of the bedroom; where a small table covered in candels stood.
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In the center of this arrangement was the mummified head of Mrs Vorhees. (not centre)
--Unless it was supose to be centre, then my appolegies, Cheetana. Anyways, a supurb story, two thums up and a great round of applause for you! I enjoyed it immensly (is that strange?) I just spotted a few small gramar and one spelling error, but thats it. Still a very good 'fic if I through in my oppinion. /cheekily grins with a blush and puts both thums up/ You made me have a nose-bleed! XD--
~S.K |