awsome ending. Mine shall be ending soon as well.

Keep it up.

A little too fast paced, but otherwise very good plot. Good suspense and drama. Maybe you should write a sequel of sorts.

I love it with mouth

But seriously, I love Resident Evil almost as much as I love Love Hina, so I think I've finally found a story I'm actually into. VERY into! Keep it up man! (I wonder what seta's going to do :/)

Evil Seta...Wow that's deep.
But radical.
Keep it up.

Roninofhinata

Well, what can I say? I'm a Resident Evil fan, yet I know barely anything about Love Hina. And I must say, that is one f*in' awesome story, man. I don't know the characters of the anime, yes, Motoko's death seemed to make me feel a lot of emotion. This story has a hell of a lot of potential. And I reckon everyone will love chapter 5, I know I did x]

Oh and you inspired me to write a Love Hina fanfic.. I'll be uploading it when I'm done. I need to watch a few eps first though, get the storyline down and so that I'm able to nail the characters. Should be fun.

Keep up the creativity, dude.

At first, i wasn't so sure such an odd crossover would work. But...Having read so far, it's been brilliant! you really nailed the emotional side with Motoko's death, making me feel a twinge of sadness as she confessed her love...Anyway keep up the good work and update soon!

Whoa you did it again this was cool. the frying pan part reminded me of one of mine except it was funnier and involved kitsune.

Spooky...that's all i can say.
Hehe sorry i lied. great job bud.

It is an interesting story premise. I found very few errors throughout the text, but did find that the story needs a little more description. A fleshing out of the scenes so to speak. The beginning is a good start, but always keep in mind it is the introduction for the reader, something that will either grab the reader's attention or have them shuffle onto the next story to catch their eye. It's good to have a very descriptive or action oriented start for this reason.

I would also advise a little more detail from the news report. Something along the lines of where the containment zone is and such. A way around that is describe one of the residence turning on the TV to find the images of a frantic news reporter describing this newest information. If the news reporter is on-site, it is likely that he would be hiding and acting very secretive, from this perspective 'good evening' doesn't convey the danger he has placed himself as he observes the zombies. also, if there is a containment nearby, Keitaro should mention it as it would be something out of the normal which is what he wished for. It would also be good to mention that Umbrella has a local branch to define how the zombies got to the residence so fast, otherwise it feels improbably that the zombies would get to Japan from Racoon city.

Disclaimer: All thoughts featured in this review are strictly the opinions of the reader. The author has the right to accept these comments or fling them away for the poo they are.

Good work so far,

brindani

Firstly, allow me just to explain that this is my first review so don't go bashing it because I might have misread something.

So far, I am quite impressed from reading the first chapter of the story, it was descriptive so that people who knew nearly nothing about either side of Resident Evil and Love Hina could clearly understand who the characters were, and what the story was about.

There were, however, some elements of the story that could be improved. Most noticeably was the usage of character speech, this could have been less common during the chapter or some more description could have replaced the speech and actions, though this was done elsewhere the most prominent use of speech-without-description which caught my attention was near the beginning.

The other most noticeable element was that even though I previously mentioned that the story was clear to all who knew nothing about either subject, there was a lack of information on the Hinata-Sou. To the unknowing reader, this could be anything ranging from a DVD Store to a luxury space station. The author may want to include a paragraph explaining the Hinata-Sou, the purpose of it and why the protagonist(s) are there in the first place.

To conclude, I, who was one of the readers who knew nearly nothing about either base subject, with Resident Evil being just a little spot of knowledge in my mind, found the first chapter quite enjoyable and descriptive enough to explain the world to me, and I thoroughly look forward to reading the next chapter.