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i dont know why but this one touched me...strange. ;_;

That nursery rhyme is actually based on the Black Death. There was a girl named Rosie who died because of the virus. Her loved ones made a ring around her grave. Hence, "Ring around the Rosies." Posies are flowers. They were placing flowers on her grave. "Ashes, Ashes." Ashes are what you corpse turns into. "We all fall down" You all fall down and die.

I don't know why it turned into a nursery song... But if you think about it, that song does kind of fit Severus' death...

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A great idea, written awesomely. I love the idea of tying in his memories with a nursery rhmye. It would've been better if it was bit longer, though.

Voldemort

Good one with this. I like how you wove the rhyme into Snape's death. It certainly made it seem even more sympathetic than it already was.

Koky

Stunning!

It's...amazing...

I've never read anything like it.

I'm definitely checking out your other fanfics!

Ohmigod, *wow*. That was terrific! The last line just sent chills down my spine! Fantastic job! *favs*

Gema

Really disturbing, dark, and beautiful. VERY well written.

That was -lovely-. Sad, but lovely. The slightly formal language, and the way the poem was integrated so smoothly, and the images it called forth. Especially that passage about Dumbledore and the phoenix, powerful image, that one.

(Would it have been more final if the last sentence ended in a single dot instead of three? Or was it supposed to sound a little vague and fading?)

That was really, really good. I love reading one-shots like this because they're so... so... there isn't really a word to describe it. And watching the number of characters that I have left as I type this review is also really entertaining...:D

-R&K

Could I possibly be a bit insane myself for thinking that basing this story on a nursery rhyme is practically genius? Though I have to admit that it was slightly confusing, I had trouble figuring out which parts were part of the flash-backs and which weren't. Other than that, it was a marvel to read, short and quick like death. Well done.

Beautiful. Do you realize this song is about the pleague? It fit so well with what you were trying to say and I hope that you are at least close to winning the contest.

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Thats such a...brilliant portrayal of Snape/Lily. The song/rhyme and Harry's eyes.

Very clever too, the fic is brilliant and I love your view on the Lily/Snape.

'…down.

His hand lost its grip on Potter’s robes, but his eyes never released those emerald orbs. Now it was too late to ask her if he could play as well…'

Really good last few lines.

x Dramione4Lyf x

Just beautiful. You handle his regrets so well, without overplaying them. Fits nicely with the rhyme.

You make it so easy to believe that it was exactly that he was thinking as he died. So much sadness and regret, it's absolutely beautiful!