Reviews for Under the Flight Path

Reviews For: Under the Flight Path

123Kay123 2008-09-10 ch 1,	abuseVery good one shot, u should continue it i think it's a great start to a great story.
Skoteinos Metamfiezomai 2008-03-27 ch 1,	abuseOrange is quite the color choice. ~IGC t DM
Amanda Hawthorn 2007-09-13 ch 1,	abuseOMG...I am so sorry I read this when you first posted and today when I was re reading it, I couldn't understand why you didn't have more reviews for this, it's a beautiful story. So then I checked the reviews and realised I hadn't let you know how much I love this. I thought I'd already reviewed. Next to Mingsmommy's 'Equal and Opposite', this is my other favourite tgtbatd fic. Please forgive me for being so late with this review.
closethedoor14 2007-09-04 ch 1,	abuseEek! I just realized that I have never reviewed this one, which is a crime in and of itself. (I think I got that little saying wrong. Whoops.) But what's WORSE, is that it's been housed in (one of) my ridiculously over sized binders for fantastic fics, and you didn't even know it! So yeah, I love this. So much that it's nice and cozy next to other great fics too. Do not worry, I shall take great care of it :)
Adrenalin211 2007-08-01 ch 1,	abuseYou know….I didn’t even see the episode this was a follow up to, because, well, I haven’t seen but the one ep I watched for you. LOL. But you make the context so (contradicting myself here) hazily clear. You don’t outright say anything, but you can feel Sara’s jealousy and loneliness like you’re all by yourself just like she is. Thanks so much for SHARING! It’s always such a treat to read what you come out with. So. Damn. Creative. “The motel itself was old and sad, located almost within walking distance of the airport and the constant thrust and roar of jet engines, so jarring at first, gradually,as the hours passed, became like background music, like white noise, like an old, comfortable relationship before it went all to hell.”-Wow. That’s pretty much all I have to say about that. It really stings to read that last comparison, and the combination of things is just so random and brilliant. “The victims, a man and a woman in their late 30s, were married, but not to each other.”-HAHAHAHA! That’s such an awesome way of saying they were doing the nasty nasty very adulterously. “What she felt was a deep, blue-black, almost paralyzing despair, one that bloomed in the pit of her stomach and stretched insidious fingers up her chest and out her limbs. “-How the fuck did you write that? That’s one of the most beautiful, well-constructed sentences I’ve ever read. “Sometimes it even worked.”-I love how you keep coming back to that. So simple, and yet it gives your orange story flair. And flare, I guess, as long as we’re being orange. “She felt the ancient bedsprings give way beneath her weight, sag and moan, and she could almost hear the identical groans of thousands of identically lonely people who had done the identical thing for the years and years and years before her.”-I LOVE the way you give a life to the bed, you personify it and the sentence becomes magical. And the years and years and years? You SO need to teach me how to be that effective with repetition. Sigh. “‘Are you…are you coming home tonight?’”-Grissom’s hesitation really makes the reader FEEL what’s going on inside of him. He’s so reluctant and scared and worried and it comes across more than nicely. More like superbly. The dialogue in this is so cool. I wish I could write dialogue like that. “She put her hand on her chest, felt the pound pound pound of her heart.”-See above. Teach me to do this with repetition! Please? To make my readers’ hearts go pound pound pound like you did mine? “‘I like this place. It’s old and broken down. It makes me feel…’ Beautiful, she thought. ‘What?’ ‘Anonymous.’”-That exchange was so beautifully brilliant. It felt…right. Okay, I won’t ramble, but may I just say that I Love it when you write? I will. I love it when you write, Bernice. The product is simply always worth a read and a read again. Whatever it is. So keep working those writing muscles. On whatever. Okay? Kay? OKAY? I love you. And you rock. And you're awesome. And this story is very orange. Claire loves orange.
FearlessnessNY 2007-07-31 ch 1,	abuseHa! That's not love, Nicky boy, that's murder. Leave it to Sara to point that out. Sounds so...Grissomesque. Sometimes, a murder is just a murder. I like the hotel room idea, how she chose to just assume this identity for herself and to just get away. And I love the 'sometimes' theme you have going here and how, staring at the mirror with Grissom's words in her head telling her she was beautiful she still thought she was ugly, and all alone in that room getting away from it all she still wondered how many people would die in Vegas. So true to her character. Like she can't quite get to the point of being free from all the negativity. It sucks that with all those people in Vegas, she could still feel so alone. Their phone conversation was really touching, and important, because she could say a lot of things she otherwise wouldn't. How sad when she's trying to deflect the pain that is bubbling just under the surface. When she starts to cry when it's too much for her to bottle up anymore... I guess he'd already know the motel because of the case she worked on and he was a CSI so he'd be able to piece together where she was just by the planes flying overhead, so it's interesting how she told him she was under the flight path; like she wanted him to come. Such a great story. How content am I right now?

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