Okay I gotta say, I love this story. I come back every once in a while to check for updates and am waiting for more. I've read your other stories and your ideas are incredibly interesting and add a nice spin on outplayed and overused dramas.

That said, I'm extremely disappointed that this story can't continue. You've made "yourself": rich, powerful, pretty, morally high, and Gary-Stuish. There is nothing left for you to do that could end this story. Everything after this is standard story fodder. There is next to nothing that could surprise or interest me in future chapters. Personally, I think this story seems like an ever increasing spiral of "look how awesome I am!" Quite frankly, you took the joke too far.

I love crossovers. You've managed to include so many different realities that my head spins, but not in a good way. The Addams family is a nice touch, but did Lockheart really need the attention of the world through film? Yeah I know, your story done your way, but he'd already gotten the attention of the magical world and suddenly the entire story is packed of the characters doing things. Yes, stories should be about characters that do things, but everything is about what Lockheart does. I saw nothing that isn't his, and thereby your, idea. I see Super!Lockheart, but what about Harry? Bloodmagic is all well and good, but sharing the gifts between everyone? You say you put limits, but you've completely changed the characters, ruined a marriage, destroyed Dumbledore's plans, made Voldemort little more than a sheep in the midst of wolves, need I go on?

Fanfiction is supposed to be based on the author's view, but these characters are so caricatured that this might as well be an completely different book. I really wish you hadn't made this first person because I would have loved to see what Harry thought of all this. I would have liked to see what Miranda really thought about memory sharing. I would have enjoyed this more if you didn't claim you are only JUST as powerful as you need to be. This story has become a character that has reached the highest level of an RPG and already fought the dungeon boss. You can go back and take care of the side quests left over, but you're able to breeze through them with little more than a scratch. Your only challenge is Voldemort and marriage and neither are particularly formidable for the character you have created.

In short, thank you for your effort, but some of this would have done better as a short, separate companion piece rather than being part of your canon. I would have liked a warning before I read that told me precisely what I'd be reading. I've become attached to this and lament the loss of a once great tale.

I really love the Addams parts of this story. And all of the things done with Blinky are so strongly Gomez... Have you thought of what you would do with the Submarine once you finish getting the salvaged magical goods off of it? Because I really think Gomez would get a kick out of having his own fully armed submersible.

Time out or not you really do need to continue the story. There's still 1 Horocrux out there and the chance for MoldyWart to make another of his familiar if he finds a way to get reincarnated.

Have you thought of using any of the House Treasures as they were designed to be used? Oh and what is the container for the final Horocrux I kinda forgotten it.

Between all the books and other things that have been released is there any chance of doing a chapter of the characters that aren't part of this growing family to show some world reactions to this glut of news and movies. Sure we saw a teensy bit of the reaction to the EMP but well that might have effected wizards too. After all I doubt the Dragon Slave would have been possible in this world if there wasn't a Historic connection where it use to be part of the Magical world here.

How is the last remaining Granger's Movie career going? Does he have any regrets over how he has ditched his family?

Gildroy has no chance for avoiding the Marriages. After all it is one of the Addams Traditions to have the Groom attempt to escape or the Bride attempt murder before the ceremony.

You could use some Lurch moments and maybe a Visit by Cousin It. What if Cousin It just happens to be a survivor of that civilization the group of 6 Mage explorers were studying the magics of?

I bet Thing could be Handy around Hogwarts too.

Another thing that might be creepy is if you had Ranma Saotome end up with a Cameo once there's a chance.

How is Star Trek going to be delivered will it be with CBS they were the ones to get it through Desilu in the first place if I remember correctly.

One thing that Absolutely must happen before any Wedding is having Gildroy spend the night at the Addams House. It just doesn't seem right for a marriage in the family without that happening in between.

Looking forward to the future but I really hope that Harry's pets are delivered soon. Between people's Animagus forms and the creatures already bought for him there are allot of rare potion possibilities there. Even without having to harm anyones form.

Well just some food for thought.

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My most prevalent thought all through-out the book is: evil men don't know they're evil. Mind you that comes in various forms. Why do I say that? Simple: The murder of four children (and one adult), and pushing religion onto children.

Let's start with murder. A personality is formed by memory, no matter how you try to justify it, altering memory leads to an alteration in personality. All a person is is a personality wrapped in a bag of flesh. When one personality becomes another the first dies. Thus by changing someone's memories wholesale you kill them. (Harry and the three Grangers) The last murder is Dudley, after all for all his faults he is a product of his environment, once removed would likely be better for it. I don't count the other Dursley's because the difference between murder and killing is intent. Which is why the bible verse should read thou shalt not murder, as kill is a mistranslation.

As for the religion pushing. I think that's nearly as bad for two reasons. One: children raised in a religious household never really have a chance to express their own beliefs, rather they express their parent's. To me that seems similar to brainwashing, its simple socially acceptable. The other problem it less self-righteous. "Talking about religious shows a lack of tact, as you never know who you might offend." In this case you started it, so I'm justified in ranting.

Beyond that it just seems wrong that any adult would allow their memories to be altered in any significant way (excluding trauma). Ted's reaction seems the one that should be standard.

Other then that it is a well written and enjoyable story. Sorry that the review is largely negative, I like to point out the good and the bad. But nothing really pops out as very good, just generally good.

Horcrux creation DOES NOT WORK THAT WAY

Psalms 104:15
Wine that maketh glad the heart of man

1 Timothy 5:23
Drink no longer water, but use a little wine for thy stomach's sake

Proverbs 31:6-9
Give strong drink unto him that is ready to perish, and wine unto those that be of heavy hearts. Let him drink, and forget his poverty, and remember his misery no more.

The prohibitions given in scripture are against drunkenness, rather than the consumption of alcohol in general. All food has properties that can effect your mood and temperament (the well-known sugar rush is just one example). As you no doubt will agree, morality is a black and white situation - thus, to make a general rule, you have to select the least arbitrary point to make a decision. For example, to decide when life begins there are only three possible non-arbitrary choices: conception, implantation, and physical birth.

Again, there are rules that have been set in place - I won't argue with you there, but I believe that the interpretation you are using is subtly flawed. Interpreting "do not engage in drunkenness" as "never imbibe any quantity of any substance with any degree of known mood-altering qualitities" is just as much of a distortion of the Word of God as interpreting "do not commit adultery" as "never have sex with anyone. Ever."

i have read this story multiple times and am shocked you edited out the duel with with dumbles youd better put it back in or a new version if thats what your aiing for and update soon.

(Dinner plate eyes) She would think stately was wonderful if done to the music, atmosphere, and clothing design of a funeral.

The priest involved would be of the devils church, of course. Um,, (scratching head) she might decide that minister of magic, fudge, should do it, just to make sure it was all legal, and such.

(Grin) she would even appreciate the atmosphere, do to the condition of fudges pants.

What size brick do you think Dumbldork will present when he finds that the person he got appointed Harry guardian, is part of the Adam's family.

Hey, You said the the Adams are the oldest, and most "powerful". Wonder if they might donate some memories to. Think about the old curses that the rest of the world had forgotten (mostly on purpose). O_O Be sure be very specific, or you might be swimming in blood.

Since you are now so go at building habitats, how about getting in that submarine, point yourself to Atlantis, put up a bubble over it, and have another place to hide from the world in.

O_o, Was that what you were thinking of when you said you wanted to hide on the dark side of the moon?

As Harry's honorary grandparents, how come Morticia did not use that list to arrange Harry some wives to?!?

The possibilities seem to be endless. Definitely want to see more of what you could come up with.


May the MUSE always be with you!
~!^

Wonderful awesome Please I beg you continue it soon.

Believe it or not, I went looking for your story when Perfect Lionheart acknowledged his use of "your" language lozenges in "Partially Kissed" as coming from a terrific story.

I think your both right. I think both of your stories are extremely enjoyable and I hope the muse will come to again soon. I would love to see where you go from here.

Couple of things struck me.

Someone in ficdom, I don't remember who, pointed out that by law, adopted children can marry brother or sisters, since they are "not" true blood kin. And Harry is "not" really adopted either.

How did Morticia, who had shown a tremendous talent at figuring out you secrets, fail to realize that the list you made up was aimed at Harry, not you. Though, it would fit with their sense of humor. (scratching chin (need shave)) It would fit the sense of humor and what's proper if she resent all those invitations you ... ducked, aimed at Harry. After all, as your ward, he is in effect, their grand child.

You probably have already realized that the gold mine habitat you created to resemble the interior of the Star Trek Enterprise, only to needs the exterior altered and transported to space to make a "true" get away. You have already shown with the submarine (possible small space boat) that magic can provide propulsion.

You are welcome to any of the above. Might let me know, but not necessary.


May the MUSE always be with you!
~!^

You probably get this often, but the story is epic, and your writing is awesome. Update soon? :3

Okay, this started off well, although I myself am against religion on principle, it seems to be an important support structure for you, and I'm not going to force you to drop it. It's inclusion in the story this heavily though does limit the audience. I just ignored it until chapter seven, and in the end I just couldn't take the memory adaption of Harry and the Grangers.

Sorry but with the 'Lockhart Day' scene I couldn't take the wannabe Messieh complex, sorry but this seems like too much of an egocentric preachfest, from an atheist, humanist or sceptics point of view.

Your a good writer though.

Your many references to religion ruined the story for me.

ZOMG. Totally my mistake. It's been so many years that I got you mixed up with Bert Van Vliet - the guy who wrote the Sky KNIGHT SI fanfics. Okay, my apologies - I was totally comparing you with someone else, not comparing your newer stuff with your older stuff.

You can basically change my reviews from saying that you've declined to a comparison with someone similar that has better plot execution and a direction you could consider moving towards.

Hrmm, my response to this is a lot like my review of Rurouni Ranko.

The idea has great potential, and your style is quite good.

But as with RR, your plot has gotten indulgent and... honestly, a bit boring.

1) This story could have been written without the SI element. Yes, I get that it's something you're good at. I really liked the Skysaber BGC fic. But unlike that fic, in this fic, there is very little about the situation that actually requires it to be a self-insert. It could just as easily have been a story about Gilderoy having a change of heart.

2) As another comparison with your Skysaber SI into Bubblegum Crisis... I distinctly remember that one of the things that was most interesting about the story is that your main character was still fallible, and in fact, the consequences of his actions resulted in the opposition getting up-gunned and an arms race starting. That older character made mistakes, hurt people he loved, and did his best with limited resources.

In comparison, the character in My Gilded Life is basically infallible. There's very little drama. Only in the first few chapters is there actually any challenge for him... after which, he gets ridiculously over-powered. He gets lifetimes of skills from Gilderoy's stolen memories (more than compensating for any lack in his wizarding skills), he effectively has unlimited resources from being able to re-write stories and comics that don't exist in your fic's world, his charm is actually better than it was when he was just Lockhart... It goes on and on.

3) In the SkySaber BGC stories, there was a lot of stuff going on that had nothing to do with the main character. He was thrown in there and he had to deal. The other characters had to grow and change, and had their own problems.

In this story, your character has made himself the center of the universe - the ultimate in self-indulgence for SI stories. He is more heroic and self-sacrificing than Harry, wiser than Dumbledore, smarter than Hermione, kinder than blah, etc, etc and so forth. Not only does your guy solve his own (Gilderoy's) problems, he is solving problems for *Everyone else* you like in messianic fashion.

And what's more, your character is preachy and it's going less into what would make the story good and more about what you don't like about Rowling's writing and characters. I mean, it's fine to have your opinion and all that, but it's taking away from the quality of the story you could be writing when you write long passages debunking Rowling's explanations for things.

It's too god-like.

What was great about the BGC fic was that there was a distinct separation from you as a writer and the character that you had thrown into the BGC world to adventure and explore, suffer and grow.

In My Gilded Life, there is almost no separation between you as the author and the character you've thrown in there. Because you, the author, perceive situation X to be so, your character *also* perceives it the same way - infallibly. It would have been so much more interesting if the character had your peeves and and irritation with parts of Rowling's work, except that when he is thrown into the reality of actually dealing with them as real people and not as characters in a story, he finds his (your) perceptions challenged.

As I've said in my review of Rurouni Ranko... this is still a pretty good story, still better than a lot of fics on ffnet. And in a lot of ways, you have improved over the years.

But, as a writer, you've gotten worse in other ways.

You like your main characters too much now. You don't give them challenges of scale. You can't stand for them to make stupid mistakes and act hurtfully, irrationally, humanly, vices and all. Any mistakes made are small mistakes, and the main guy never means badly and is adroitly self-justifying in a way that shows just how superior you as the author think the character is compared to the others in the story.

This doesn't just make the bad guys less complex - what you may not notice is that it also makes the good guys in your stories less complex too.

I hope your writing gets better again.