brilliantly written and very funny !
i simply adore this.

Omg most forth wall breaking stories are bad but this really fits! thank you for sharing this wonderful style of type and the use of mary sues with the readers!

Nice summary, just had to let you know.

The awesomeness. The whole story made me laugh like a maniac.

Hey!


Wonderuful story! You really got the essemce of a sue.Hehe, the ending was pretty good. Overall you did great at the humor in this story! You are a very good writer.



Though I was wondering, would it be allright if I do a sequal to this story? If not, I'll probably do a different story called creation of the anti-sue. But still, would that be allright with you?

~Tink~

What a great story!

From the very first chapter with the partying rare hunters I knew I was in for a treat. What I liked most about this story was the way in which you constantly tapped into new aspects of idiocy with regards to fanfiction writing. It wasn’t just the over described, over perfect Mary Sue that you parodied, it was also the ridiculous creation of millennium objects / god cards, the tearing apart of the behaviour of the central characters, the plot inconsistencies. You were constantly innovative and humorous in your approach.

My favourite bits… hm… well I loved the rare hunters. I thoroughly enjoyed the Egypt bit with the hints at T ratings etc. I laughed aloud when it came to deciphering exactly when the story was supposed to be taking place within the canon. I really enjoyed Mokuba’s understanding and manipulation of the description and dialogue and thought your parody of group conversations (everyone doing something at the same time to save description) was spot on.

As an English teacher (yes really) I feel an obligation to point out one small problem that I had with your writing which is in the dialogue. If someone (say Kaiba) says something which is followed by a reaction from another character (say Mokuba) then the reaction should be on a new line, otherwise the ownership of the dialogue can become confused. For instance:
‘I’m sick of being cast as the romantic lead in silly Mary Sue plot lines.’ Mokuba laughed.
‘I know what you mean.’

Mokuba laughed should be on the same line as his dialogue. So:
Mokuba laughed. ‘I know what you mean.’

I hope that makes sense?

Sorry, lesson over. I hope that you take that in the constructive way in which it’s meant. I honestly wouldn’t bother pointing it out if I didn’t really like everything else about your writing.

Thanks for providing so much entertainment.

Jensti

I'm sorry it's taken me so long to review. I've been really busy :S

But I'm reading it now! ^_^

Malik is funny when he tries to take control of the chapter xD This really reminds me of Marik's Evil Council of Doom ^_^

Hooray for random blue-green glow! ^_^

“Oh no!” Yugi cried. “I think they’ve summoned something!”
GASP! I had no idea!

“I thought Phalanx was a Greek term,” one of the Rare Hunters had the boldness to say.
Lol, I was thinking the same thing xD

But you should've made the 4th egyptian god Thoth :S

Pleasant conversations among villains about mass murder are fun! ^_^

So... wut was the mistake Sakurelle made again? I can't find it? Or are you just refering to the whole Sakurelle/Kaiba thing at the end of the last chapter?

Deus ex Machina! Whee! ^_^

Except for the polite conversation, Bakura seemed pretty stable, tho o.O

“I really do have to thank you,” Sakurelle said, "For lying to me for 29 chapters so at the very end you could insult me and make me feel horrible about myself, which would then miraculously save the world!"

Anyway, very nice chapter ^_^ It was nice having Sakurelle turn into a normal girl.


And xD at Gary Stu!!

Anywayz, I hope you do a humor story like this again soon, 'cause you are really good at parody!

^_^

Aw! That was so cool! Really good way to end the story with Sakurelle changing. The word "phalanx" is the name given to 3 bones in the foot/leg of a horse. The 1st phalanx is the pedal bone (the one which is the shape of the foot inside the foot), the 2nd phalanx is the navicular bone (the little boat-shaped bone behind the pedal bone), and the 3rd phalanx is the short pastern (the one which joins the foot to teh rest of the leg). I dunno if you can understand the terminolgy lol! I guess it must be Greek or Latin or something. That was a fab fab fab fab ficcy! Can't wait to see your new one! I salute you. *salutes* BTW, check out my newest fic - based on "My Fair Lady", it's Seto x Kisara and I'm really proud of it - the name above is my username I changed it like twice! I wrote the one where Kisara falls in the pool when Seto's skinny-dipping!

Hey! I just read your Mary Sue Curse story! It was so good! I loved it! It was so cute-Kaiba was so mean!! 8D You're an awesome writer!!

I loved the "Call me Seto, it's distracting otherwise" Hahaha very lovely excuse! The "lack of knowledge" for hacking was really funny I thought--the simplified graphic of roses!

The whole Kaiba- Rockstar thing... wow! I'm trying to picture it and I just can't picture the hair! Was it like spiked in front or like a "Yugi spike" kind of thing going on? It makes me really want to draw a picture of it :D

GREAT story!! Loved it! Keep writing!

Excellent story, it's good that she isn't a Mary Sue. But a Gary Sue? Could that possibly mean Yaoi?

Thank you so much for writing this, it was a lot of fun^^

This chappy had to be one of my favorites. :)
Nice ending.

^_^

Well done, loved it. I want more parodies if you can manage it.

NO!IT CAN'T BE OVER!-.-
n/e way this was a great story.always made my day^^
good job on it^^

Ah too bad it's finished, but it was a nice ending :D
I loved the flinching at flinching part, I was laughing out loud there LOL xD I'm stupid like that xD