Poor Edo. :(
The military people are mean bastards!! >.<
Well written. You should do more.
xoxo

Wow... well-written and very powerful.

The decisive omission of direct quotations and the streams of sentence fragments really give this an awesome, haunting vignette feel. It seems surreal and realistic at the same time, like someone's life condensed into a glance.

Good job. Kudos!

Let us hope it was the first person who infected him ne? Talk about karma biting you in the butt...

That was... scary. Your writing style was creative and well done.

Wow that was deep... And dark. Wow... o_O
*faves*
You need to write more of this..! Very original, the plot. I haven't read anything like this. Amazing.

oh. my. god. that was beautiful!
ed seems so...down and...sadly submissive.
i wish you would make a sequel, what happens to ed? does he die? what do the people in the military say? all that stuff is zooming around my mind.
i love the writing style too, the day by day acount with no actual names mention is really nice.
keep writing!

Cool. Would have liked it more, well, story-like. I mean, no. Wait, how do i say it? Uh, not so fast and stuff. With the sex. You know!

aww poor ed-kun =( great story, keep writing!

Poor Ed. This is such a sad story.

poor Ed! Great Job!

Remember, kids... USE A CONDOM.

Wow, this was so unexpected. Great story. Poor Edo...

Aw, so sad. Great story!!

Okay, well, wow. That was very good, poor Ed! It was a bit... disturbing, however. DAMN THOSE HORNY MEN! Haha, Al is probably so confused...

WOW @_@ Heavy really heavy

Well written... but man was that deep

Your story made me speachless, really it did. You're writing is excellent, much better than what I can do. I'm still a beginer after all. Anyway, this is touching, and sad, how Edward reacts and everything. Really, It's hard for me to say much.