I'd say you did a good job, I liked the story. And thnx for starting the game fic

Not bad. Though I can see this was an early first effort writting for this game. But it was nice take on the classice ghost story scenario, just feels like it could have been fleshed out a bit to add some suspence and unease to the twist. Also some parts did seem a bit tagged on, like the talk about Connie just kinda came in there. But still, it was nice. Of course, it's nice to see there was indeed a Bumpy Trot story long before the ones we've got now. :D

Just wish more people would write for this game, it's got so much potential! _

I can't believe this is the only story I found for Steambot Chronicles. That transport was really creepy...

lol! I remember this scene! It creeped me out at the time.

Thank god someone else is into this fandom! _ This is seriously my favorite game ever, and I'm really suprised no one's written about it yet...

The story was good, great, even. However, you seemed to tell about what was going on more than you showed it, so it moved a little fast. Otherwise, you did an excellent job on the story (the title's a bit bland, though.)

Loved the Resurrection Mary reference (I live in IL, so...)