Reviews for The way it goes

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Kefka VI 2007-11-30 ch 7,	abuseGood fic but the ending seemed kind of rushed
EVAN AAML 2007-11-30 ch 7,	abuseSo is this the end of the story? Uh, well you did a better job of writing this story, the only problem I had was that you didn't explain alot of the conscience, you really didn't even have to have him in the story, you should have explained more. But all in all, great job! I can't wait to see what other stories you plan on making soon! I'll keep in touch! sincerely, evan, a fan of aaml -EVAN AAML
EVAN AAML 2007-11-29 ch 6,	abuseUh oh! Looks like Ash is in a bit of trouble! Hope it's not too serious! Anyway, being an author, I feel that I should say that this chapter was a bit rushed. You should have added more detail from when you started, since that's when Ash's accident occured. You might also want to change the font of the writing for when Ash is in his head since people can't tell the difference. It's confusing to read. But in general, you did a great job of writing this story, I hope you update soon and continue your great work! sincerely, evan, a fan of aaml -EVAN AAML
EVAN AAML 2007-11-29 ch 5,	abuseVery cute! Short, sweet, and to the point, great job! I read your profile before reading this chapter and I realized that your 16 and already going to college! I'm the same age and I'm only a sophomore in High School, although I suppose it was something to do with where we live. Anyway, great job! I will be on the next chapter right away! sincerely, evan, a fan of aaml -EVAN AAML
Kefka VI 2007-11-15 ch 6,	abusecliffy
Kefka VI 2007-10-25 ch 5,	abusegood but short
liltrix 2007-09-28 ch 4,	abuseIt's liltrix7 from dA! :3 I think the overall story is nice so far, although it seems pretty rushed, and personally I think Misty would probably be the person to tell Ash her feelings since Ash is kind of slow on these types of things. XD Also, check your punctation because there's a few errors on that, as well as grammar. I'd take more time to draw more emotion in the story, and be more descriptive of their surroundings and maybe body language. There's a bit too much dialouge. It's not bad though, I like it.
EVAN AAML 2007-09-26 ch 4,	abuseGreat job with the chapter update, sorry I couldn't review this earlier, my computer chrashed...or at least the internet did. Great job! I loved the way you used the phone to show their feelings. And the poem was a classic, sounds like something I would say to a girl, ( don't worry, I won't steal yours to do so ). Keep up the great work! sincerely, evan, a fan of aaml -EVAN AAML
general shadow wolfsbane 2007-08-24 ch 3,	abuseAll right dude! I'm glad you liked my story I do think this is a great story for a newbie and well, keep it up and I hope to see you grow as a writer.
EVAN AAML 2007-08-22 ch 3,	abuseA great chapter, loved the mallet beatings, one question, you mentioned Ash's hand slipping, I can imagine where, but I am not 100% certain, where did it slip? Great job anyway! sincerely, evan, a fan of aaml -EVAN AAML
Raven the Ravenous 2007-08-22 ch 3,	abuseI wonder what happens next? I remember reading a fic with AAML in the beginning even though it was M-rated but it started out without much plot before it began to delve deeper into the pair. If you ever have time to read it, it's called "Depths of the Heart" by mizu-no-hime. It's really good. Well, all I can say is update soon.
EVAN AAML 2007-08-21 ch 2,	abuseAh, another great chapter! Loved them finally getting together! Same advice as before, but great job! Can't wait for the update! I will be looking forward to that, and any other stories you will be having out! sincerely, evan, a fan of aaml -EVAN AAML
EVAN AAML 2007-08-21 ch 1,	abuseAh, a great story so far! I loved the way you wrote it, the only thing I could suggest to you is making the chapters longer and more detailed, other than that, it was great! sincerely, evan, a fan of aaml p.s- I am EVAN AAML, the author of the stories you like, The Dare Game, and Wishes Come True. -EVAN AAML
Raven the Ravenous 2007-08-03 ch 2,	abuseNice fluff. But the one most important thing a story like this needs is, well all stories need is, a purpose. Once that's figure out, the story shouldn't be a problem to write.
general shadow wolfsbane 2007-08-03 ch 2,	abuseTo me it feels a bit rushed. But then Again you just started out, so yeah, I hope you can make a lot of stories of AAML. However this is some good fluf. I hope your story develops. A lot of good luck from General Shadow Wolfsbane. Please read my stories.

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