Wow, your story was very intersting, but may I suggest a few things?

Don't put author commentary in there. It's rather annoying for the reader to read it. It's like going to the movies and somebody making commentary all the time while you're trying to watch. Or perhaps watching the director commentary in a movie DVD before watching the actual movie.

I like how you had the numbers at the bottom. Perhaps, if you wanted to, you could have done that for all of your commentary?

~Isamu

Very cute and funny! The last part about Yuri and Murata was good. I liked the story on the whole. The only problem I could find were the number of grammatical errors. This would have been a perfect story, save for those!

Well...I must say i actually enjoyed that. A little frustrated that it ended like it did...would have loved to see how it turned out with those two (for some odd reason) for some reason when I watch or read yaoi 'incest'...I don't look at like incest - all i really see is two hot guys getting it on, and for some reason that doesn't bother me in the slightest. Though I don't purposely go looking for couples that are related. A good example of how my morbid curiosity works is I love 'papa to kiss in the dark', or maybe the fantasy of the smexy twins from the host club. Perhapes because my brain nows its not real, and I should just enjoy the hotness while i can see it. Yes, I do think thats the answer, and I enjoyed the hotness that you wrote, very well done. You dared venture into a taboo that most people wouldn't understand. Bravo on your bravery and well done fiction. .^_^.

*high-pitched fangirly scream*
DAT WUZ HOT! me loves this pairing! i don't care if it's incest. Gwendal and Conrad deserve each other! and it also adds spice *gets hit*

ow...hey! everyone is entitled to their opinion. i'm just a bit...different. yeah, that's it...different.

Thank you Tristana-san for translating this. i wish i cud read french to save u the trouble. (T.T) ah well, best of luck!

Well that was interesting as this is a whole new territory for me since I usually read Yuuram related stories. However for a translation it was pretty good just some minor spelling mistakes. Keep up the good work!